Letter of motivation

Paulchen · Gast

Hallo ihr!

Ich würde mich gerne für ein Kurzstipendium in Taiwan bewerben, bei dem man die Möglichkeit hat auch zwei Monate lang in ein Unternehmen reinschnuppern zu dürfen oder an einer taiwanischen Uni zu studieren. Leider sind meine Fähigkeiten einen Letter of motivation zu schreiben doch eher begrenzt Haue / Kloppe / Schläge

Darum würde ich euch bitten mal über den bis jetzt geschriebenen drüber zu schauen. Kann auch sein das da grobere Fehler vorhanden sind, also nicht so streng mit mir sein Augenzwinkern

Wäre lieb von euch wenn ihr mir ein paar Tipps und Verbesserungsvorschläge geben könntet.

"
Dear Mrs. .....

Globalization does not only produce internationally active companies and globally available goods, but requires the prospective employees and an open mind for other countries and cultures. This cosmopolitan and more practical insight into the Taiwanese industry will be attained with the possibility of scholarship in Taiwan Summer Institute Program.
After finishing the „A-level“ in June 2006, I went to Senftenberg to study at the University of Applied Science Lausitz. In summer 2011 I will finish my fifth year of study with the Master of Engineering in Business Administration and Engineering with a concentration in Energy Economics. At that time I will have reached a very profound knowledge in Business Administration, Renewable Energy Technology, Renewable Sources within power generation and Engineering.
Because of my very good academic results I have received a scholarship at Vattenfall for my master's program. I also filled an assistant position at my university in which I, the Germany-wide project Laterra, a fertilizer with CO2 - explore cost-binding properties. In the course of my specialization I have chosen the field of energy and renewable energy and pursue long been the desire to apply my experience and internationally. That is why I think it is the best time to deepen my academic knowledge in a foreign country like Taiwan, with a performing industry especially in high tech industry and the energy sector.
I would also like the more theoretical work and my experiences of my Bachelor thesis to further expand if possible with practical experiences.
Furthermore I think it’s a great opportunity to get to know different countries, cultures and economic mindsets, which differ essentially from the German, which I know best. Working with a Taiwanese company would be a great option for my further career.
In my free time I play football with my friends. In the past I played in a football team what strengthened my communication skills and team spirit.
I am sure, that I meet the internship requirements and I will do my best to make this stay in Taiwan a successful part of my career. I would greatly appreciate this opportunity.

I am looking forward to hearing from you.

Yours sincerely,

......."

Paulchen · Gast

So jetzt hab ich es nochmal etwas ver(schlimm) bessert...
Kann mir denn wirklich keiner helfen?

"
Dear Mrs. Knapp

The economy of modern times does not only comprise of internationally active companies and globally available goods, it also requires prospective employees and an open mind for other countries and cultures. To achieve this, I would like to receive an academic and industrial insight into the industries and universities in Taiwan with the possibility of a scholarship in the Taiwan Summer Institute Program.
After finishing the „A-level“ in June 2006, I went to Senftenberg to study at the University of Applied Science Lausitz. In summer 2011 I will finish my fifth year of study with the Master of Engineering in Business Administration and Engineering with a concentration in Energy Economics. At that time I have reached a very profound knowledge in Business Administration, Renewable Energy Technology, Renewable Sources within power generation and Engineering.
Because of my very good academic results I have received a scholarship at Vattenfall for my master's degree program. I also filled an assistant position at my university, working on a Germany-wide project “Laterra”.
In the course of my specialization I have chosen the field of energy / renewable energy and I would like to apply my experience internationally. That is why I think it is the best time to deepen my academic knowledge in a foreign country like Taiwan, with a performing industry especially in high tech industry and the energy sector.
I would like to extend the theoretical work and the experience of my Bachelor Thesis further, if possible with practical experiences. Furthermore I think it’s a great opportunity to get to know different countries, cultures and economic mindsets, which differ essentially from the German, which I know best. Working with a Taiwanese company would be a great option for my further career.
In my free time I play football with my friends. In the past I played in a football team what strengthened my communication skills and team spirit.
I am sure, that I meet the internship requirements and I will do my best to make this stay in Taiwan a successful part of my career. I would greatly appreciate this opportunity.

I am looking forward to hearing from you.

Yours sincerely,
"

MI · Administrator Anmeldungsdatum: 22.01.2005 Beiträge: 1140 Wohnort: München

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