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 Verfasst am: 10. Jun 2010 13:15 Titel: Korrektur meines Letter of Motivation (Master) |
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Hey,
Ist von euch vielleicht jemand so nett mir mein Letter of Motivation zu korrigieren?
Ich habe schon einige Jahre keinen englischen Text mehr geschrieben und dementsprechend schwer ist es mir gefallen.
Wenn ich jemandem mit Problemen zur BWL helfen kann, tue ich das als Gegenleistung natürlich gerne!
Dear Madam or Sir,
My main motivation for studying at the University of ***, is my intend to study in an international environment at a respectable university. I would like to gain international knowledge, in order to work for an international company, like a bank or a consultancy, after finishing my master‘s degree.
To archive this goal, there are several requirements to be fulfilled, which I would like to broaden during my time in ***. Having checked the homepage of the University of *** and the master‘s programme brochure, I am very confident that this program can provide me with sufficient acadamic qualification, language skills and the ability to work in a team, which all are essential in today‘s business environment.
Another reason for my interest to study in ***, is that I always wanted to study abroad in order to get in contact with other students from foreign countries and cultures, and to face the challange of working with them in teams. In the last years, I traveled a lot and as a consequence I got to know many people from different countries and cultural backgrounds. I think the varying viewpoints, which people from different regions have, make life and study much more interesting, especially in business topics, which often do not have just one right opinion or answer.
Furthermore I am very attracted by the „Problem Based Learning“ system. PBL combines gaining soft skills and academic knowledge. I believe that working on concrete problems will help me to deal with the subjects taught in the master‘s program. During my bachelor‘s program in „Business Administration“ at the University of ***, I liked the problem-orientatated business cases very much, because of their combination of theory and practice. I also esteem the possibility to choose from several elective courses, so I can adapt part of the content to my own preferences. The small classes at the University of *** are another reason for my interest, because in my point of view, the classes with hundredth of students at other universities are not adequate for studying effective.
During my studies at the University of *** I specialized in the area of „Banking and Finance“. I gained a deep insight into a bank‘s business, capital markets, derivates and risk management, which I enhanced during an internship at the „Sparkasse“, where I managed an own project, to increase the rentabilty of several headquarters.
In summary, it can be said, that I am very convinced of the University of *** and the offered master program. I would be pleased to be part of the program, by contributing my high motivation, my ability to work in a team and my business knowledge.
I am looking forward to hearing from you.
Yours sincerly, |
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| Verfasst am: 11. Jun 2010 21:41 Titel: Re: Korrektur meines Letter of Motivation (Master) |
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Einige Kleinigkeiten habe ich gefunden und verbessert.
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Dear Sir or Madam, "Sir or Madam" ist die gebräuchliche Form im Englischen - "Madam or Sir" klingt in meinen Augen wie "sehr geehrte Herren und Damen"
My main motivation for studying at the University of ***, is my intend to study in an international environment at a respectable university. I would like to gain international knowledge, in order to work for an international company like a bank or a consultancy after finishing my master‘s degree.
To achieve this goal, there are several requirements to be fulfilled, which I would like to broaden during my time in *** Der Satz ist so ziemlich seltsam. Was genau möchtest du aussagen?. Having thouroughly studied the homepage of the University of *** and the master‘s programme brochure, I am very confident that this program can provide me with sufficient acadamic qualification, language skills and the ability to work in a team, which all are essential in today‘s business environment Vorschlag meinerseits. Evtl. schöner, ist aber Geschmacksache .
Another reason for my interest to study in ***, is that I always wanted to study abroad in order to get in contact with other students from foreign countries and cultures, and to face the challenge of working with them in teams. During the last years, I traveled a lot and as a consequence I got to know many people from different countries and cultural backgrounds. I think the varying viewpoints, which people from different regions have, make life and studies much more interesting, especially in business topics, which often do not have just one right opinion or answer.
Furthermore I am very attracted by the „Problem Based Learning“ system. PBL combines gaining soft skills and academic knowledge. I believe that working on concrete problems will help me to deal with the subjects taught in the master‘s program. During my bachelor‘s program in „Business Administration“ at the University of ***, I liked the problem-oriented business cases very much, because of their combination of theory and practice. I also esteem the possibility to choose from several elective courses, so I can adapt part of the content to my own preferences. The small classes at the University of *** are another reason for my interest, because in my point of view, the classes with hundredth of students at other universities are inadequate for effective studying.
During my studies at the University of *** I specialized in the area of „Banking and Finance“. I gained a deep insight into a bank‘s business, capital markets, derivates and risk management, which I enhanced during an internship at the „Sparkasse“, where I managed an own project, to increase the rentabilty of several headquarters.
In summary, it can be said that I am very convinced of the University of *** and the offered master program. I would be pleased to be part of the program, by contributing my high motivation, my ability to work in a team and my business knowledge.
I am looking forward to hearing from you.
Yours faithfully, da Adressat nicht bekannt. |
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