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Christine · Gast

Hallo!

Ich muss morgen den folgenden Text in Englisch abgeben. Wär toll wenn diesen jemand Korrektur lesen könnte.

Skydive
Ready!?? – Set! – Go………

Skydive was a wonderful expirience for me. Last year i wage my first jump and i be sure it wasn´t my last.

Before we had started this adventure, we must absolve a preparation in de Skydive-School. A Trainer gives us instructions and rules for the right behavior.
Then we put on a all-in-one suit. My trainer and partner was Jürgen for this fligh. He fit the equipment for the parachute on my body.

The first dry run on the ground was very simple. My feeling was good, that i will pass this challenge also in the air.
Jürgen gaves me the last instructions before we go to the plain. In the plane was 25 people. 1 pilot,12 trainers and 12 people just like me.
It begans. The pilot start the propellers from the plane and we fly away. It was a wonderful fligh with a view from the Böhmerwald to the Dachstein.

After 20 minutes and 4000 altitude difference the pilot shout: „ 5 minutes to the dropzone“. Jürgen link me on his equipment and we put on the glasses and the helm. In this moment i was very nervous.

One more the pilot gives the trainers a message. He said: „I´m ready, we can open the door!“
Jürgen gaves me a sign and say: „Let´s go!“ Few seconds later the moment was come.
The pilot shouts: “Ready?“. Jürgen gaves a sign with the hand. Then the pilot shouts: „Set!“, and we bring us into position. The last commando from the pilot was „Go“ und we jump out from the plane.

It was a unbelievable feeling. We fly 60 seconds an 1500 altitude difference with 200 kilometers per hour to the ground. Then my trainer open the parachute and we fly 5 minutes to the ground.
The adrenalin rush was enormous.
I can recommend this adventure to everybody. It was fantastic.

Schneweldo · Anmeldungsdatum: 17.01.2010 Beiträge: 7

Ich versuch mal dir zu helfen :

Skydive
Ready!?? – Set! – Go………

Skydive was a wonderful expirience for me. Last year i wage my first jump and i be sure it wasn´t my last.

Before we had started this adventure, we must( had to würde besser passen ) absolve a preparation in de Skydive-School. A Trainer gives(wenn du in der Vergangenheit schreibst gave ) us instructions and rules for the right behavior.
Then we put on a(an , zwei hintereinander folgende a wird im englischen nicht so gerne gesehen) all-in-one suit. My trainer and partner was (passt hier nicht hin Jürgen( hier besser were my partners ) for this fligh. He fit the equipment for the parachute on my body.

The first dry run on the ground was very simple. My feeling was good, that i will pass this challenge also in the air.
Jürgen gaves(gave "he , she , it das s muss mit" nur im Simple Past ) me the last instructions before we go (went) to the plain. In the plane was (were) 25 people. 1 pilot,12 trainers and 12 people just like me.
It begans. The pilot start ( started) the propellers from the plane and we fly ( flow) away. It was a wonderful fligh with a view from the Böhmerwald to the Dachstein.

After 20 minutes and 4000 altitude difference the pilot shout: „ 5 minutes to the dropzone“. Jürgen link (linked) me on his equipment and we put on the glasses and the helm. In this moment i was very nervous.

One more the pilot gives(gave) the trainers a message. He said: „I´m ready, we can open the door!“
Jürgen gaves me a sign and say: „Let´s go!“ Few seconds later the moment was come( besser came).
The pilot shouts: “Ready?“. Jürgen gaves a sign with the hand. Then the pilot shouts: „Set!“, and we bring(brought : hört sich komisch an , ist aber so ) us into position. The last commando from the pilot was „Go“ und we jump (jumped) out from the plane.

It was a (an) unbelievable feeling. We fly (flow) 60 seconds an 1500 altitude difference with 200 kilometers per hour to the ground. Then my trainer open(opened) the parachute and we fly 5 minutes to the ground.
The adrenalin rush was enormous.
I can recommend this adventure to everybody. It was fantastic.
Da waren einige Fehler wegen der Zeit . Du warst in der Gegenwart , während Vegangenheit besser passen würde . Ich drück dir die Daumen , falls es benotet wird .