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MissTaty
Anmeldungsdatum: 23.03.2009
Beiträge: 2
Wohnort: Brühl
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 Verfasst am: 23. März 2009 17:00 Titel: Bitte Letter of Motivation korrigieren :) |
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Hallo ihr!
Ich bewerbe mich für ein Studium in Holland und bräuchte jemanden, der mal über meinen Letter of Motivation drüberschaut.
Wäre super was anregegungen, verbesserungen etc angeht! 
Danke schonmal im vorraus!
Dear Madam or Sir,
I would love to study Hotel Management since my first stay at a high-class hotel in 2004.
What really influenced me during this stay was the lovely care and service that the staff offered.
I was so impressed by the excellent work atmosphere that enabled each guest to feel the staff’s joy of being employed there.
In my opinion the work atmosphere is the most important thing while you are working because it will enhance the productivity and quality of your work, which on the other hand will make your guests feel comfortable during their stay.
I really like to organize things, as I already did while I still was in school. I had to organize our Pre-Prom parties to gain money for our A-Level Prom Night. My tasks included the bookings of the
DJ´s, Promotion and organizing the work shifts for my schoolmates during the party. I was responsible that everything works out and everyone had a good time. What I have discovered during organizing this Event was my strength to work together in a team, even if I am the person in charge. I also think that my ability of solving problems under pressure helped a lot to make this Event special.
Likewise, I really like to travel and gain new experiences and get to know different people and cultures. I love working with different people, so during school I started working as a hostess and translator at trade fairs and exhibitions. Therefore I know the importance of presenting myself and the company by comforting the customers and guests. Furthermore I have experience in serving people because I have worked in several Clubs and Cafés.
I think Hotel Management is the right choice for me as I enjoy making people feel comfortable but also having responsibility and the possibility of travelling is very striking for me as well.
I have visited the NHTV on an Open Day and it has enforced my wish to study in Breda.
The multicultural environment and the fact that the course of studies will be in English really attracts my interest of improving my English and getting to know new people from other countries.
I also am really excited about your teaching methods and, to be honest, I think that Problem-based-learning is way more efficient than the usual methods.
I would be very pleased if I could study Hotel Magement at the NHTV Breda and hope to get a positive response from you.  |
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Gast
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| Verfasst am: 24. März 2009 10:55 Titel: Re: Bitte Letter of Motivation korrigieren :) |
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| MissTaty hat Folgendes geschrieben: | Dear Madam or Sir,
I would love da würde ich nochmal überlegen, ob eine andere formluierung nicht besser wäre, zB want to to study Hotel Management since my first stay at a high-class hotel in 2004.
What really influenced ?? impressed? und den folgenden satz dann zB so ändern me during this stay was the lovely care and service that the staff offered.
I was so impressed by the excellent work atmosphere that enabled each guest to feel the staff’s joy of being employed there.
the staff’s joy of being employed created a work atmosphere that made every guest feel welcome.
In my opinion I believe the work atmosphere is the most important thing one of the most important factors while you are working at the workplace because it will enhance the productivity and quality of your work, which on the other hand wo ist denn die eine hand? besser, then will make your guests feel comfortable during their stay.
I really like to organize things, as I already did while I still was in school. I had to organize our Pre-Prom parties to gain money for our A-Level Prom Night. My tasks included the bookings of the
DJ´s, Promotion and organizing the work shifts for my schoolmates during the party. I was responsible that everything works out and everyone had a good time. What I have discovered during organizing this Event was my strength to work together in a team, even if I am the person in charge. I also think that my ability of solving problems under pressure helped a lot to make this Event special.
Likewise, I really like to travel and gain new experiences and get to know different people and cultures. I love working with different people, so during school I started working as a hostess and translator at trade fairs and exhibitions. Therefore I know the importance of presenting myself and the company by comforting the customers and guests. Furthermore I have experience in serving people because I have worked in several Clubs and Cafés.
I think Hotel Management is the right choice for me as I enjoy making people feel comfortable but also having responsibility and the possibility of travelling is very striking for me as well.
I have visited the NHTV on an Open Day and it has enforced my wish to study in Breda.
The multicultural environment and the fact that the course of studies will be in English really attracts my interest of improving my English and getting to know new people from other countries.
I also am really excited about your teaching methods and, to be honest, I think that Problem-based-learning is way more efficient than the usual methods.
I would be very pleased if I could study Hotel Magement at the NHTV Breda and hope to get a positive response from you.
den rest finde ich gut |
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MissTaty
Anmeldungsdatum: 23.03.2009
Beiträge: 2
Wohnort: Brühl
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| Verfasst am: 30. März 2009 04:37 Titel: |
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alles klar danköööö sehr lieb!  |
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