kann mir jemand diesen text korrigieren(Fehler durchsuchen)?

Li · Anmeldungsdatum: 25.05.2005 Beiträge: 5

hi,
ich hab ne frage, warum ist mein text am ende "sehr konfus"? traurig

The immigrants come from Europe, Sweden, France and Holland. They had leave their homes because many of them hoped to find in America freedom and gold. Many families went to America and started there a new life as famers. When they arrived there, there were other people. They called them Indians. At first the Indians were peaceful people, because they showed them how to grow corn and vegetables and they shared their land with them. When they didn't do that, the Europeans didn't survive. Later the Europeans wanted to have more land from the Indians and pressed in the hunting grounds from the Indians. But the Indians trying to save their hunting grounds. Before the war about the land between the Indians and the Whites started, they had make an agreement with their own rules. But for all that it gave a big dispute. So the war started. The Whites won the war and so the Indians had to go in reservates. There they learned how the Whites lived and they had to accept it. The rest of them would have died. The Europeans were happy and surched for gold on the land from the Indians.

würde mich freuen, wenn ihr noch mehr fehler entdeckt und es mir sagt.

danke schon mal im voraus Mit Zunge

Cathy · Gast

The immigrants came from Europe, Sweden, France and Holland. They had left their homes because many of them hoped to find freedom and gold in America . Many families started there a new life as famers. When they arrived in America, they were surprised seeing other people. They called those people "Indians". First the Indians behaved peacefully, because they showed the immigrants how to grow corn and vegetables and they shared their land with them. If they had refused to do that, the Europeans wouldn´t have survived. Later the Europeans wanted to have more land from the Indians and pressed in the hunting grounds from the Indians. But the Indians tried to save their hunting grounds and before the war about the land between the Indians and the Whites started, they had made an agreement with their own rules. That gave a big dispute, so the war began. The Whites won the war and as a result the Indians had to go in reservates. There they learned how the Whites live and they had to accept it. The rest of them had to die. The Europeans were happy and searched for gold on the land belonging to the Indians.

L. Madley · Anmeldungsdatum: 17.05.2005 Beiträge: 3 Wohnort: Rostock

"Many families started a new life as famers there." ist besser.

VG LOL Hammer

Ulli · Ehrenmoderator Anmeldungsdatum: 03.07.2004 Beiträge: 1389

Li · Anmeldungsdatum: 25.05.2005 Beiträge: 5

hi,
danke für eure hilfe, da wäre aber noch ne frage: was kann man statt ".....and pressed in the hunting grounds from the Indians." und ".........had to go in reservates." schreiben? Das hat mein Lehrer rot unterstrichen, ich weiß aber nicht warum! traurig

danke

Ulli · Ehrenmoderator Anmeldungsdatum: 03.07.2004 Beiträge: 1389

Wie lautet der deutsche Text zu den gefragten Textstellen? grübelnd

Dann kann ich dir besser helfen.

LG Ulli

Li · Anmeldungsdatum: 25.05.2005 Beiträge: 5

hi,
da gibt es keinen deutschen text zu. Die Aufgabe war, einen text über die immigrants schreiben. der lehrer hat n paar stichpunkte dazu aufgeschrieben aber sonst nichts.

danke

Ulli · Ehrenmoderator Anmeldungsdatum: 03.07.2004 Beiträge: 1389

Li · Anmeldungsdatum: 25.05.2005 Beiträge: 5

hi ulli,

das hört sich ja alles nicht schlecht an, aber mein lehrer hat nur in reservates unterstrichen, had to go nicht. hab mich falsch ausgedrückt.
Danke für deine Hilfe.
smile

Ulli · Ehrenmoderator Anmeldungsdatum: 03.07.2004 Beiträge: 1389

....es muss auch reservation heißen, das ist alles. Augenzwinkern

LG Ulli

Li · Anmeldungsdatum: 25.05.2005 Beiträge: 5

hi
also: "The Whites won the war and as a result the Indians were banished to live in reservation"?

danke nochmal Mit Zunge