English Grammatik!

vahid · Anmeldungsdatum: 10.01.2010 Beiträge: 1

Ich habe morgen eine Buchvorstellung in
English. Ich habe diesen Text als Summary benutzt. Ich würde mich freuen wenn das jemand korriegieren würde. Da sind sicherlich viele Fehler, weil ich aufgrund von Zeitdruck nicht so viel auf die Grammatik geachtet habe.
Herzlichen Dank schon mal im Vorraus

Einleitung: The story "On the Klondike Trail" was written by Richard Emanuel. The theme in this story is, that almost all the human in Seattle are in gold fever, because a ship is on July 17, 1897 stranded with two tons of gold in Canada. .
So everybody speak in Seattle about the gold that was found, also the two brothers, Al and Karl Wolff and the 15-year-old Willy Wolff. The son of Karl Wolff.
Willy goes on an exciting journey and at the end he meets the love of his life.

It was August 9th, 1897, when the brothers go on to the steamship Excelsior.
They want to sail from north of Seattle in the town of Skagway. From there are only two roads through the mountains to Canada.
Willy also wants to go to the Klondike to help his father and his uncle.
On the way to Skagway, Willy is working on the ship with the cook to collect money for his equipment. Willy get 50$ from the cook.
Then a gang steal willys money in a marked in Skagway.
After that he got an indication from a man with a uniform, where his father and uncle might be. Willy helps in the ferry to chilkoot trail two sibling who are his age, to transport their luggage to Sheep Camp. He will get money from the 17-year-old men. He arrive Bennett Lake and sleep by the Steward family. That is between Dyea and Chilkoot Pass.
Willy works in Sheep Camp in the restaurant by the Stewards family. Eines Tages wird
One day, Jack is ask by a man to bring his outfit to Chilkoot Pass.
After two weeks Jack Steward, Mike Price and Willy reach Chilkoot Pass.
Willy says goodbye to Jack, Lucy and goes to Canada.
Willy follows a trail to Lake Lindeman. He see Mike Price after Seven days in Lindemann. Mike Price sagt zu Willy, dass er genau den Messer den Willy hat bei einem Laden in bennett gefunden hat.
Mike Price says to Willy, I found the same knife in a shop in Bennett that you have Willy.
Willy knows that his Uncle has also the same Knife, so he goes with Mike Price to Bennett. He hopes that he will find his father and his Uncle.
Willy works for two weeks in a shop in Bennett and one day his father come to the shop and wants to pick up the knife that his brother has lost. Willy sees his Vater, Karl Wolff.
Willy is in the Yukon River in May of 1898 and the spring came slowly.
After 2 days, the ice is broken and everyone sail to the gold.
Because of the Rocks in the river, are 100 boats destroy and 5 men are dead.
Finally comes the boat of the Wolff family against another boat and so we boat of them are also destroy. So they go home without the gold.
After five months, the family and Stewards Wolff Wolff sit in the house in Seattle.
Willy and Lucy go under a tree and talk about their journey after they have not seen each other.
Lucy says to Willy, that they have built a railroad. They also sold their Gold Nugget restaurant in September and earn 20,000 $
We were just too late says Willy and so the mine gold had already been taken.
At the end of the story says Albert, that he will go with a friend to Nome, Alaska, to look for Gold. He ask Mike, Jack and Willy and everyone laugh. Willy says I found my Gold on the Chilkoot Trail. He took Lucys hand.

Schneweldo · Anmeldungsdatum: 17.01.2010 Beiträge: 7

Ich versuch dir mal zu helfen :
Besser wäre "The theme of the Story"
... because on July 17,1897 a ship stranded...
...so everyone in seattle is speaking ...
... Willy also wanted to ...
... he arrived ...
Eines Tages wird ? ( flüchtigkeitsfehler)
... Jack was asked by ...
... he saw...
...willy was working in a shop for two weeks...
... the ice was broken...
... and 5 men were dead...
... and earned ...
...and everyone laughed ...
achte darauf , dass du nicht so mit den Zeiten umherspringst . ansonsten reine Flüchtigkeitsfehler , die jedem mal passieren können .