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 Verfasst am: 28. Feb 2005 21:01 Titel: Überprüfung eines Englischtextes |
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Hallo,
wäre nett, wenn ihr den Text auf grammatischen und sprachlichen Fehlern untersuchen könnt.
| Zitat: | History:
Middle Ages:
In the middle Age (circa 400-1450) a public education was only possible for the clergy in monastery schools and in church schools. Farmers, manual workers and traders were educated in the parental home as far as it was possible. Later “city schools” and private “reading and writing schools” were developed , which were the precursors of primary school.
Historical development until 1945:
In the age of the enlightenment (1720-1800) a fundamental change of comprehension/understanding of education and school executed. The people used their minds and so they changed their attitude to the school. Then it gave private teaching and the schools were controlled by the orders and cities.
Weimar republic:
In 1919 the general compulsory school attendance, which was fixed in the article 145 on/about the Weimar republic, was fixed. One year later the “4jährige” primary school was founded.
National socialism:
On the basis of national socialism the aim of the school system was many years missed. There was racism theory, so the teaching was „ideologisiert“. It gave “extra booklet”, instead of school books and the pupils were taught to live according to national socialism, which was completely wrong.
Education after 1945:
1945 the winner states (Soviet Union, USA and England) devised the Potsdam agreement:
All national socialism persons and organizations should removed from the German and Austrian society, culture, press, economy and politics.
Besides the reduction of the army and the removal of the ordnance depot should take place./
Also the reduction of the army and the removal of the ordnance depot were implemented.
Furthermore a democracy should developed and the education system should put in new order in Germany.
After 25 June 1947 all should have the same education chances and the teachers were trained at the university.
Western Germany 1945-1990:
In the Federal Republic of Germany, which was founded in 1949, the education system was given in the hands of the countries. As a result of this regulation each state has its own school laws which differ slightly from one another.
By the science council , which was founded in 1957 and which is competent for the discussion of the countries …
By the „Düsseldorfer agreement“ the general holidays order , the “Notengebung” and the school term were regulated.
In 70`s there was a rapid „Anstieg“ of the persons who has done the Abitur.
Reunification of Germany:
It was the end of the separate development of west and east in 1990. The education system in the new federal states should orientated on the partner countries. |
Wäre super nett.
Danke.  |
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Hey, hier meine Vorschläge
| Zitat: | | In the middle Age (circa 400-1450) a public education was only possible |
-In the Middle Ages public education was [...]
auf jeden Fall ohne Artikel, da keine bestimmte Bildung gemeint ist und Middle Ages immer im Plural
| Zitat: | | traders were educated in the parental home as far as it was possible |
-as far as possible
| Zitat: | In the age of the enlightenment (1720-1800) a fundamental change of comprehension/understanding of education and school executed. The people used their minds and so they changed their attitude to the school. Then it gave private teaching and the schools were controlled by the orders and cities.
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-executed passt in diesem Fall nicht -vielleicht: took place
-[...]the people start to use their minds and that is why their attitude towards school changed. Then private teaching was established and schools were [...]
| Zitat: | | In 1919 the general compulsory school attendance, which was fixed in the article 145 on/about the Weimar republic, was fixed. |
-meinst du, dass das gesetzlich festgelegt wurde?
Dann würde ich vorschlagen: In 1919 the general cumpulsory attendance was fixed in article 145 of the Weimarer Constitution.
Aber ein "fixed" ist auf jeden Fall zuviel.
| Zitat: | National socialism:
On the basis of national socialism the aim of the school system was many years missed. There was racism theory, so the teaching was „ideologisiert“. It gave “extra booklet”, instead of school books and the pupils were taught to live according to national socialism, which was completely wrong.
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-[...] the school system failed for many years.
-There were "extra-booklets" instesd of[...]
[...]according to the national socialism Ach übrigens nie ein Komma vor which, who, where, etc.
| Zitat: | All national socialism persons and organizations should removed from the German and Austrian society, culture, press, economy and politics.
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- should be removed ( ist Passiv)
| Zitat: | | Furthermore a democracy should developed and the education system should put in new order in Germany. |
- Furthermore democracy should be developed and the education system in Germany should be renewed.
| Zitat: | After 25 June 1947 all should have the same education chances and the teachers were trained at the university.
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After 25... all people should have the same education chances, moreover the teacher were trained at university
| Zitat: | | was given in the hands of the countries. |
-was given into the hands of the states (country ist Staat, aber ich glaube du meinst Bundesländer)
| Zitat: | | It was the end of the separate development of west and east in 1990. The education system in the new federal states should orientated on the partner countries. |
- In 1990 there was the end of the seperate develpment of West and East. [...] should now orientate...
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