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englisch89
Anmeldungsdatum: 26.02.2005
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 Verfasst am: 01. Jun 2005 21:24 Titel: Etwas für Englischkönner! Textüberprüfung! Bitte um Hilfe! |
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Hallo!
Ich hab mal einen Text geschrieben und ich wäre sehr nett und ich wäre euch sehr dankbar, wenn ich mich auf meine Fehler aufmerksam machen könntet und Verbesserundvorschläge machen würdet.
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1) Never before he was so angry like now, but he has to think more about his finances.
2) He can't pay $ 2,200 and so he swears to take revange on his ex-girlfriend, then he has more than $ 20,000 debts and now this $2,200 (Vieleicht besser: kommen auch noch hinzu, oder so, wie könnte ich das besser schreiben?)
3) He can't pay the money and hopes, that they will forget his debts.
4) Four monthes later the police comes to him, because he didn't pay his debts by a lot of firms, and says, that he is arrested.
5)He can flee to his car and drives away.
6)Because his ex-girlfriend made a lot of his debts, and he is so or so (sowieso?) arrested, he searches for her and kills her.
7)Now he is in arrest for the rest of his life , but he zhinks, that it was a good price for this.
Danke im Voraus! |
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Ulli
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Anmeldungsdatum: 03.07.2004
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| Verfasst am: 02. Jun 2005 10:01 Titel: Sätze |
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@ englisch89 
hi, mein Korrekturvorschlag hierzu 
) Never he has been so angry like now, but he should to think more about his finances.
2) He can't pay $ 2,200 and so he swears to take revenge on his ex-girlfriend, then he will have more than $ 20,000 debts and additionally $2,200 (Vieleicht besser: kommen auch noch hinzu, oder so, wie könnte ich das besser schreiben?)
3) He can't pay back the money and hopes, that they will forget his debts.
4) Four months later the police comes to his house because he still hasn't paid his debts to a lot of firms, and says, that he is going to be arrested.
5)He is able to flee to his car and drives away.
6)Because his ex-girlfriend has made a lot of his debts, and he is (sowieso?) arrested anyway , he searches for her and kills her.
7)Now he is in arrest for the rest of his life but he thinks that is a good price for it.
Manchmal sind die Sätze etwas zu lang bzw. verschachtelt. 
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LG Ulli
Tomorrow is often the busiest day of the week.
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Gast23
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| Verfasst am: 03. Jun 2005 18:16 Titel: |
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hi,
mein Korrekturvorschlag:
Never he has been so angry like now, but he should think more about his finances. |
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me
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| Verfasst am: 29. Jul 2005 10:47 Titel: |
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| Gast23 hat Folgendes geschrieben: | hi,
mein Korrekturvorschlag:
Never he has been so angry like now, but he should think more about his finances. |
mein vorschlag dazu  :
He has never been so angry before but he should think more about his finances. ( würd ich so sagen)
im englischen gibt es nur selten kommata
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