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peregrina42
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 Verfasst am: 17. Jun 2011 10:44 Titel: Letter of Motivation for Master-Program |
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Hallo! Ich habe diesen Letter of Motivation für meine Master-Bewerbung verfasst. Da mein Englisch recht schlecht ist und ich nir unsicher bin, was Inhalt und Struktur anbelangt wäre es echt super, wenn jemand darüber lesen könnte! Her mit eurer Kritik! Vielen lieben Dank!
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Letter of Motivation
Dear Madam or Sir ,
I would like to take this opportunity to provide further backround information in support of my application for entrance to the Physics Master program at the University of Hamburg.
When I graduated high school I immediately enrolled at the University of hamburg for the studies of Physics, which offered a wide range of subjects dealing with basic knowledge, practical experience and forecast of current research. Allways interested in natural science I gained an insight in Astronomy and Astrophysics by choosing it as my subsidiary subject.
Furthermore I decided to write my bachelor thesis at the observatory of Hamburg as a member of the group of Peter Hauschild, working on theoretical stelar-atmosphere models.
I am certain that my previous studies, my ability to work, my great curiosity and strong interest makes me a highly suitable candidate for the Master-program at the University of Hamburg. I want to deepen my knowledge on theoretical astrophysics, particularly with regard to cosmology and exraterrestrial planets, both topics I got in contact with by participating astrophysical proseminars in my previous academic career.
Thank you for considering my application, and I look forward to your positiv response.
Sincerely yours, |
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| Verfasst am: 17. Jun 2011 18:37 Titel: Re: Letter of Motivation for Master-Program |
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| peregrina42 hat Folgendes geschrieben: |
I would like to take this opportunity to provide further backround information in support of my application for entrance admission to the Physics Master program at the University of Hamburg.
Wie auch im Deutschen gilt es would like zu vermeiden, Hätte, würde, wäre: geht alles nicht. Allerdings seh ich ein, dass du ein einleitenden satz brauchst. den dort oben finde ich nicht so gelungen
When I graduated from high school I immediately enrolled at the University of hamburg for the studies of Physics, which offered a wide range of subjects dealing with basic knowledge, practical experience and forecast of current Vorhersage eines derzeitigen Standes?? research. Allways interested in natural science I gained an insight in Astronomy and Astrophysics by choosing it as my subsidiary subject.
Furthermore I decided to write my bachelor thesis at the observatory of Hamburg as a member of the group of Peter Hauschild, working on theoretical stelar-atmosphere models.
I am certain that my previous studies, my ability to work, my great curiosity and strong interest makes me a highly suitable candidate for the Master-program at the University of Hamburg. I want to deepen my knowledge on theoretical astrophysics, particularly with regard to cosmology and exraterrestrial planets, both topics I got in contact with by participating astrophysical proseminars in my previous academic career.
Dieser Absatz ist wirklich gut geworden
Thank you for considering my application, and I look forward to your positiv response.
Sincerely yours, |
Wenn du den ersten Satz nochmal überdenken magst, wird es ganz gut. War ja nicht so viel zu kritisieren. Warum musst du deine Bewerbung auf Englisch machen?? Nun gut, wer weiß. |
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peregrin42
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| Verfasst am: 20. Jun 2011 19:08 Titel: |
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Suuuper vielen Dank für schnelle und präzise Antwort!!!! Du hast mir wirklich sehr geholfen. Danke! Danke! Danke! |
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