Frage zur Aufgabenstellung + Analyse

cara · Anmeldungsdatum: 31.01.2007 Beiträge: 6

Hey,

Also ich hab hier nen Text, und zwei Aufgaben dazu. Hab die erste Aufgabe so gut wie fertig.. um sie zu ende machen zu können hätte ich kurz zwei Fragen.

Die Aufgabenstellung lautet zur 1. Aufgabe:
1. How does the author of this text deal with the topic of obesity? Give an outline of what the author says and how she/he composes the article.

Also ich hab den text ganz normal erstmal zusammen gefasst ..
Jetzt steht da ja "How the author deals with the topic"
Soll ich dann auch noch die Meinung des authors rausschreiben?
Und bei "how he composes the article" ist damit gemeint, dass ich die Struktur beachten soll?
Meinetwegen: Problemerläuterung, Gründe, Fazit?

Und könnte sich dann jemand mal meinen Text/Analyse durchlesen wenn er fertig ist?

Tschüss
und Danke..

Goldenhind · Ehrenmoderator Anmeldungsdatum: 17.08.2006 Beiträge: 399

cara · Anmeldungsdatum: 31.01.2007 Beiträge: 6

Dankeschön erstmal.

Hier ist mein bisher verfasster text, wäre nett wenn jemand einen Blick drüber werfen könnte und Fehler anstreichen könnte oder Verbesserungsschläge liefern würde.

The text " Why Are Our Kids Overweight" from WebMD University is about reasons why so many children are overweight today.
At the beginning of the text, the author says that the case of being overweight was not so important a decade ago.
He mentiones that typicial obesity,relataed illness like diabetes or apnea were not a porblem for childs.
Rallie McAllister says that trends in our community lead to the childrens overweight.
Furthermore there is said that at the moment obesity is the most important medical problem that our children got.
Childhood obesity is described as a nation epidemic. More than 60% of american teenagers are overweight or even obese. Twenty years ago the number of obese children was at 45%.
This number is rising so that children follow their parents in their footsteps and fastly joining the rank of ovberweight adults.
At the moment approximately 30 percent of the kids in the USA got a weight problem furthermore nearly 11 percent of the American teenagers are obese.
In the past 30 years the number of overweigth children has more than doubeld, mostly in the past 10 years,
Now six million kids in the USA meet the critical status of being overweight or obese.
In general to be overweight means to have more than 15 oercent above their desirable weight, while obese is if you got more that 20% to much weight.
Many oberweight kids will rise up and will be overweight or obese as adults.
Not every overweight kid is damned to a lifelong fight against weight problems the risk of getting obese rises as children get older.
After finished the third year of life the probability that pbesity will persst into his adult life rises with each passing year.
About 30% of obese preschoolers and 50% of obese school aged children will be obese as grown up.
Teenagers have a 70-80% chance to carry theur extra weight into adulthood.
The problem of obesity in the childhood is just at the beginning to be understood. Different influences like the genetic part or the cultural and social part play an important role.
Children from caucasia got less problems with obesity like African-American or hispanic ones. The kids who live in south USA got less problems than in all other parts of the USA.

Danke schonmal.

Goldenhind · Ehrenmoderator Anmeldungsdatum: 17.08.2006 Beiträge: 399

Ulli · Ehrenmoderator Anmeldungsdatum: 03.07.2004 Beiträge: 1389

Btw one's : eher ones..... Lehrer

Goldenhind · Ehrenmoderator Anmeldungsdatum: 17.08.2006 Beiträge: 399

Also ich meinte "one's" anstelle von "their", da habe ich mich wohl etwas unklar ausgedrückt.

cara · Anmeldungsdatum: 31.01.2007 Beiträge: 6

Hallo

Erstmal vielen Dank habeversucht mich an deine Ratschläge zu halten.
Hätte jetzt abe rnochmal eine Bitte... könnte sich noch jemand mein Comment kurz auf Fehler durchlesen?
Das wäre sehr nett...

I am of the opinion that the author of this text deals with a very important topic which should not be unattended.
Our society do not care enough about this serious problem of childhood obesity. This problem is prevailed in many wealthy countries, but the numbers of obese children is rising rapid.
In general too less people do something against this problem and the society does not realise the seriousness of this issue.
In my opinion the kids can not be blamed for their heavy overweight.
In most cases the problem develops in the families. The parents got jobs so that they are not able to be at home and to care enough for their children when their kids arrive .The children come home after school and see a kitchen filled with junk food and sugarery sodas. In order to this they must care for themselves and eat many unhealty things. After their meal they entertain oneself with televions or cumputers. They fill their whole day with fast food and sedentary pursuits. These type of children eat much more calories than they can waste so that they gain fat.
Another reason for this problem is the frequent number of fast food restaurants.
Many young people like to eat in those restaurants where many unhealthy food is offered.
They spend too much money in unhealty food and drinks because they got too much freetime. Not enough possibilities for freetime activitities are offered to them and thats a reason why they spend their freetime at home.
Another probable solution can be seen in the politic.
More politicans should take measures against this problem, because they have the opportunity to speak to our society.
They should give more informations to schools and parents of obesed children so that this problem will not rise in the future.

Ulli · Ehrenmoderator Anmeldungsdatum: 03.07.2004 Beiträge: 1389