Dominik
Gast
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 Verfasst am: 19. Feb 2011 17:15 Titel: Korrekturlesen |
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Hallo,
könnte bitte mal einer Korrekturlesen???
Wäre nämlich sehr nett, da ich mich auf
eine Klassenarbeit vorbereiten muss.
Dear ... ....02.2011
I want to write you just some lines that you know I am alive.
My holiday here in London is very great. I have seen many
sights and the weather is good. Today the sun shines and
I want to go to the Tower of London. There I will see the
Crown Jewels and the Ravens. At the Tower I can learn
a lot about its history. Did you know that they began to
build it in the year 1078 and that they used it as a state
prison?
Yesterday I have visited the Houses of Parliament and
Big Ben. The Houses of Parliament are built between 1840
and 1870. It´s interesting that radical Catholics wanted to
blow up the Houses of Parliament. The bell, named Big
Ben, wheigs 13800 kg. Did you know that?
On Thursday I have seen the biggest Anglican church,
Westminster Abbey. It was build between the 13th and 16th
century and it is the most visited church in Britain. There is
a school, namend Westminster School.
Wednesday was exciting to me. I have visited Buckingham
Palace. It has 775 rooms and Duke of Buckingham built
it in the 18th century. At 11.30 am the Guard´s change.
It was very interesting to see how the Guard´s move and
listen to the music.
On Tuesday I have visited Trafalgar Square and Nelson´s
Column. This column is five meter high. Trafalgar Square
was build from 1758 to 1805 and was designed by John
Nash. It is a place for protests.
That are the sights that I have visited. I hope you will have
enjoy it. Unfortunately I must come back tomorrow. But I
am looking forward to see you again.
Best wiches
Danke schonmal im voraus.
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| Verfasst am: 20. Feb 2011 13:13 Titel: Re: Korrekturlesen |
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| Dominik hat Folgendes geschrieben: |
Dear ... ....02.2011
I want to write you just some lines that you know I am alive. My holiday here in London is very great. I have seen many sights and the weather is good. Today the sun shines and I want to go to the Tower of London. There I will see the Crown Jewels and the Ravens. At the Tower I can learn a lot about its history. Did you know that they began to build it in the year 1078 and that they used it as a state prison?
Yesterday I have visited the Houses of Parliament and Big Ben. The Houses of Parliament were built between 1840 and 1870. (Das ist ja eine Passivform - aber sollte wohl Vergangenheit sein) It´s interesting that radical Catholics wanted to blow up the Houses of Parliament. The bell, named Big Ben, wheigs 13800 kg. Did you know that?
On Thursday I have seen the biggest Anglican church, Westminster Abbey. It was built between the 13th and 16th century and it is the most visited church in Britain. There is a school, namend Westminster School.
Wednesday was exciting for me. I have visited Buckingham Palace. It has 775 rooms and Duke of Buckingham built it in the 18th century. At 11.30 am the Guards change. It was very interesting to see how the Guards move and listen to the music. Guards ist natürlich eine Pluralform - kein Genitiv der Singularform, also ohne Apostroph 
On Tuesday I have visited Trafalgar Square and Nelson´s Column. This column is five metres high. Hier sollte deine Form eigentlich sogar auch korrekt sein, hört sich für mich aber nicht ganz so schön an, deswegen bin ich mir nicht sicher. In dieser Satzstellung hätte ich eher "five metres", also im Plural, benutzt, während in der Form "It is a five metre high column" ich dann die andere Form nutzte. Generell favorisiere ich zudem die britische Schreibweise, aber das ist dir überlassen. Trafalgar Square was built from 1758 to 1805 and was designed by John Nash. It is a place for street protests.
These are the sights that I have visited. I hope you have enjoyed it. Unfortunately I must come back tomorrow. But I am looking forward to see you again.
Best wishes
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Insgesamt ist dein Englisch einfach, aber gut verständlich. Manchmal liest sich der Text aber ein bisschen zu sehr als Aufzählung, denn als flüssigen Text.
Ein paar Probleme scheinst du mit den Passivzeiten zu haben, ansonsten ist mir nichts besonderes aufgefallen (grün sind noch zwei Vorschläge).
Gruß
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