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Anmeldungsdatum: 08.06.2006
Beiträge: 40
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hallo zusammen, brauche mal wieder eure hilfe. habe diesen text für eine homepage verfasst, in dem ein produkt sowie unternehmen näher gebracht werden sollen. vielleicht könnt ihr mal drüberschauen, bin wie immer für verbesserungen dankbar - war mir bei der wahl einiger wörter nicht sicher.
The Product
The product of the company ... is a heatable slipper, handmade by its members. The name of the product ... is a composition of the words warm and shoe.
Inside the shoe, a cloth element filled with wheat is stored. It can be heated separately with a cup of water (important - prevents the wheat of running dry) in the microwave. The recommended temperature is reached by heating it circa 2-3 minutes on 600 watt. Afterwards, the sole can be put back inside the slipper and warms the feet for about 45 minutes.
By establishing a hook-and-loop fastener at the back of the shoe, the slipper can be opened and closed very easily.
The slipper is available in the colours beige, black, blue, pink and purple. Furthermore, all colours are offered with different applications.
Consistent [meinte passend zur kalten Jahreszeit - passt das?] with the colder season, a fluffy edition in the colours black, red and white is forthcoming.
All shoes have one size and are fitting approximately from size 38 to 43.
The Company
The mini-company was founded within a project at university in ... and stretches across a period of two semesters. On the one hand, one aim is to realize the learnt knowledge about e.g. marketing, product development, finance and distribution; on the other hand, the self-developed product should be placed successful on the market.
Home of the Whoe S.C. consists of twelve motivated [gibt es ein besseres Wort für engagiert?] students of the study courses International Business and Management Studies and International Marketing. The young team is accompanied [wird begleitet von??] by a lecturer, a mentor and the organisation Stichting Jong Ondernemen.
The company is directed by a General Manager and is structured in the following departments: Human Resources, Marketing, PR, IT, Finance and Production. These departments are all made up of a Manager and an Assistant.
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