hey, könnt ihr das mal bitte korrigieren, danke

sunnyday · Anmeldungsdatum: 24.03.2009 Beiträge: 1

wäre cool, wenn jemand meinen text kontrollieren würde und wegen ausdruck und so mal gucken würde und es verbessert

hmm ok, also das ist mein text^^:

Jade Goody – hate figure or caring mother?
Jade Goody was a British celebrity. She came into the public spotlight while appearing in the reality TV show Big Brother in 2002, an appearance which led to her own television programmes and the launch of her own products after her eviction. I think the character of Jade was special; she had the raw talent to amuse people, therefore many people loved her.
The TV cameras recorded the shocking moment while the doctors told her that she would suffer from cervical cancer and now she died last Sunday morning, the 22 of March 2009. I think it will be very hard for her husband; she had married one month before she died and also for her two sons Bobbie and Freddie she had left. I heard of her death on the TV and I’ve read it in the newspaper and it made me a bit sad to see a young lady who has passed her life with 27 years. Her way of pain was recorded and documented by lots of cameras for a long period of time. I think she had done it for her children. She wanted to care for her children destiny and doesn’t want to leave them without any protection of financial bottlenecks.
Back to my headline, I don’t think that she is a hate figure; I think that she was a caring mother, who wanted the best for their children. In my opinion the media exploit her, her whole situation and how she has lived with diagnose to have cancer and the media has made it for their needs. I think they have made a good-selling story out of it. I would like to propose to commemorate Jade Goody, her inspirational life and her brave battle with cancer. I think we could rename Mothers Day to "Jade Goody Remembrance day" so that she will never be forgotten, and so that she may serve as an inspiration to future generations in the fight against cancer. I think that mothers never really die, they just keep house up in the sky.

Gast

Jade Goody – hate figure or caring mother?
Jade Goody was a British celebrity. She came into the public spotlight while appearing in the reality TV show Big Brother in 2002, an appearance which led to her own television programmes and the launch of her own products after her eviction. I think Jade was special; she had raw talent for amusing people, therefore many people loved her.
The TV cameras recorded the shocking moment while the doctors told her that she would suffer from cervical cancer and she died last Sunday morning, the 22 of March 2009. I think it will be very hard for her husband; she had married one month before she died and also for her two sons Bobbie and Freddie she has left behind. I heard of her death on the TV and I read it in the newspaper and it made me a bit sad to see a young lady who has passed away at 27 years. Her painful journey was recorded and documented by lots of cameras for a long period of time. I think she did it for her children. She wanted to care for her children's destiny and didn't want to leave them without any financial protection.
Back to my title, I don’t think that she is a hate figure; I think that she was a caring mother, who wanted the best for their children. In my opinion the media exploited her, her whole situation and how she lived with cancer diagnosis and the media has used it for their needs. I think they have made a good-selling story out of it. I would like to propose to commemorate Jade Goody, her inspirational life and her brave battle with cancer. I think we could rename Mothers Day to "Jade Goody Remembrance day" so that she will never be forgotten, and so that she may serve as an inspiration to future generations in the fight against cancer. I think that mothers never really die, they just keep house up in the sky.

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