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Anmeldungsdatum: 09.12.2008
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Wohnort: Hamburg
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 Verfasst am: 09. Dez 2008 21:43 Titel: A day in the Heidpark: Bitte korrigieren! Danke :) |
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 Hallo du!
Könntest du dir den Text mal lesen und mich korrigieren? Das wäre sehr nett.^^ Mit meinem Englisch harperts noch ein bisschen.
Bitte sag mir, wenn ich was streichen kann.
DANKE
A day in the Heidepark
On a Friday my class and I made an exceptional excursion to an amusement park which called Heidepark. The entrance wasn’t very cheap that's because I had a demanding expectation about the whole park. But this expectation was completely fulfilled. Before we went in my eyes focused on a funny ride looked like cups of tea. I tried out it and it was very stimulating. On this day I was determined and wanted to visit the “Most important rides”. So I went to the Colososs the biggest and quickest wooden roller coaster in Europe-a great masterpiece. Shortly before the Highlight I had a sinking feeling and was very hysterical. At the end I became a happiness feeling and forgot the little nightmare maybe because of the adrenalin. As we moved on I saw booth where you can win soft toys and also a sweet midget rail. The whole area was decorated with colorful flowers and reproduced building for example the white house or the statue of liberty. It was admirable how detailed they arranged the park. Even there was a sea with fountains and steamboats on it. Beside I went to roller coasters with many loops and other gigantic rides with tunnels. On the way out I passed a booth with roasted almonds with a flavor made me hungry. They were compelling tasty so I bought them. This day in the Heidepark was a superb incredible excursion. That’s obviously the opinion of the whole class!
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