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Reno · Gast

When Tayloe obtained the message that his cooperator wants to kill himself and the order that anyone brings a couple of young females rats to the island, Tayloe noticed that somethink is worng. He hast the suspicion that Barny ist still alive and hast killed his coworker. Barny was a very intelligent rat and so it was not impossibly that this rat had killed him. On that score Tayoe decided to travel back to the island and kill Barny before he can bandy his genes. A few days later on that island Tayloe scouted after Barney and after a few hours he found a little den(höhle). The den there wars a little rat citywith smal houses. Anyone had to become the letter first and have to send many females rats to this island. Tayloe wants to flee because there were over 500 rats. He tripped over a branch and tumble to the ground. The rat armee noticed him and attacks him until he was death.

Pro and Contra animal experiments
Pro. To fight against human diseares, animal experiments are justified to save the human life.

Contra. Animals are living beings too. There become bad treatmend and live in a small box. They have not enough to eat and so it were better to further "tierfreieversuche"( ka wie das auf english heisst) and develop them.

Hoffe ihr koennt mir helfen und die Texte korrigeiren thx im vorraus.

Reno · Gast

wäre nett wenn mir jemand ebend kurz mal den Text auf die Gramatik überprüfen würde... habe probleme mit den Zeiten. Thx im vorraus. Gott

Ukkat · Gast

Eigentlich hab ich ja net so viel zeit, aber ich bin mal sozial und nutze die Korrektur auch als Abivorbereitung...

1.) heißt der kerl wirklich tayloe oder doch eher Taylor?!

2.) couple of young female rats..

3.) tayloe noticed that somethinG is wrong

4.) he has the suspicion that barny is still allive and has killed his co worker ( better: working mate ).

5.) barny used to be a very intelligent rat and so it was possible to be killed by this rat.

6.) ....kill barny before he could bandy ( was auch immer das jetzt heißen soll ) his genes.

7.) a few days later Tayloe....lass das "on that island" weg.

8.) This den was a little rat city with small houses.

9.) anyone had to receive a letter first and had to send many females to this island.

10.) Tayloe wanted to flee....

11.) The rat army noticed him and attacked him until he was death ( ich glaub du meinst, sie haben die ratte angegriffen und dann tot geschlagen oder? vom einfachen angreifen stirbt man auf jeden fall nich ).

Pro and contra animal experiments

pro: - to fight against human deseases

con: -animals are creatures,too ( living beings geht auch, klingt aber irgendwie komisch ).
- they receive bad treatment and live in small boxes
- they do not get enough food and so they are better to do further
animal free experiments on them and develop them

ICh denk mal, soweit war der Text ok gewesen.
ich denke, dein Problem ist nicht im Vordergrund die Zeiten sondern auch die Rechtschreibung einiger Wörter. Kann jetzt aber auch sein, dass das durch das Eintippen hier geschehen ist.
Gucks dir einfach nochmal an und bei Fragen, einfach stellen!

Reno · Gast

jo alles klar vielen dank