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Gast
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 Verfasst am: 17. Nov 2005 15:30 Titel: Hello, can anybody check my little text, please? |
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Hello,
I wrote a little text about fuel cells in cars, can you read the text for a short correction, please?
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Fuel Cells:
Will fuel cells cars replace cars with internal combustion engines in the future?
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I would like to discuss about fuel cells and their enforcement in private cars against combustion engines. I think a change to fuel cells would be the right way to reduce the greenhouse gas and protect the health of people, they could go through the city without breathing stinky. We would not be depend on oil or petroleum, the production of hydrogen could be produced clean, with big solar panels in deserts or areas with a big sun time. In addition, the actual price for hydrogen would be decreased, so that it would be interesting for shipper and other transport companies. A big part of the taxes for the new gas could be decreased, so that goods could be got cheaper, because transports would not be so expensive. In the later time, people could produce their own hydrogen and could use it for their car or perhaps for their houses too.
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Bye Christopher  |
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Gast
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Ulli
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Hi English Learner,
habe mich mit deinem Text befasst  . Einige Sätze musste ich kürzen und auch verschiedene Worte ersetzen. Vergleiche am besten.
Fuel Cells:
Will fuel cells cars replace cars with internal combustion engines in the future?
(introductory sentence, main part, concluding statement)
I would like to discuss about fuel cells and their enforcement in private cars against combustion engines. I think a change to fuel cells would be the right way to reduce the greenhouse gas and protect the people’s health. Then they could go through the city without breathing stinky air. We would not depend on oil or petroleum. The production of hydrogen could be cleaner, by means of big solar panels in deserts or in areas with a long sunshine. In addition the actual price for hydrogen could be decreased. That it would be more interesting for shippers and other transport companies. A big part of the taxes for the new gas could be cut in price. Also goods would get cheaper, because transport would not be so expensive.Then in future people could produce their own hydrogen and could use it for their cars or perhaps for their houses too.
 
ohne Gewähr
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LG Ulli
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