Personal Statement

Coco · Gast

Hi, wir mussten so ein personal statement schreiben. Jetzt wollte ich euch mal drum bitten, es mir zu korrigieren. Aufgabe war, auch die verschiedenen Zeiten einzubauen.

At present I´m studying English, German, History, Religion ans Sports. I have enjoyed all these subjects up to now but I prefer History ans Sports at most. I think it´s important to have knowledge about what happened in the past and it´s very interesting to get an impression how life was in other times. But after sitting and learning for a long time you want to move your body and I´m interested in the different sport kinds.
I have been playing tennis since my eight birthday. After three years I became successful and with twelve I won my first prize. Then I became better ans better. So far I have got seven medals and I hope I still (will) get more.
Except tennis, I´m playing football and riding the bike. Currently I´m making sports five times a week and I wish that I will be taking part in the City Marathon next Monday.
After school I´d like to spend time in other countries, maybe in Great Britain or the USA. At the moment I don´t know how I will manage job and sports. But this spring I will be visiting GB because my relations live there and I travel to them every year to this time.
Next year in summer I will have finished my voluntary work at the church, so I will have more time.
I´m looking forward going to University, maybe in GB or the USA, and I hope I can do my sports further and win some more medals.

Könnt ihr mir das bitte korrigieren, auch von den zeiten her?! unglücklich

Liebe Grüße, Coco

chibimalik · Anmeldungsdatum: 15.05.2005 Beiträge: 91 Wohnort: USA

At present I´m studying English, German, History, Religion and Sports. I have enjoyed all these subjects up to now but I prefer History and Sports at most. I think it´s important to have knowledge about what happened in the past and it´s very interesting to get an impression of how life was in other times. But after sitting and learning for a long time you want to move your body and I´m interested in the different kinds of sport.
I have been playing tennis since my 8th birthday. After three years I became successful and at the age of twelve I won my first prize. Then I became better and better. So far I have got seven medals and I hope I will get even more.
Besides tennis, I´m playing football and riding the bike. Currently I´m doing sport five times a week and I wish that I will be taking part in the City Marathon next Monday.
After school I´d like to spend time in other countries, maybe in Great Britain or the USA. At the moment I don´t know how I will manage job and sports. But this spring I will be visiting GB because my relatives live there and I travel to them every year at this time.
Next year in summer I will have finished my voluntary work at the church, so I will have more time.
I´m looking forward to going to University, maybe in GB or the USA, and I hope I can do my sports further and win some more medals.

Coco · Gast

danke sehr! Mit Zunge