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M. · Gast

Hi,

kann mir jemand den text bitte grob korrigieren?!
Ich habe mit dem freien schreiben probleme.

About the sport in Ireland

In the last years the successes of Ireland in the worldsport were unproportional high in comprehension with the populationnumber.
Ireland had good results by the Olympic Games.
The favourite sportkinds in Ireland are traditional ballgames like Gaelic Football, Hurling (thats something like hockey) and Camogie (that´s Hurling for women).
Those games are nearly only played in Ireland.
The high points are the endgames of them, which takes place in September in the Croke Park in Dublin.
Football is playing in all age groups.
Ireland is a very good place for sportkinds (im Freien: was heißt das?) like hunting, shooting, fishing but also riding.
Because of the 3000 km large coasts you can also sail or paddle.
It gives more than 400 golf course over the land placed.
The Murphy´s Irish Open and the Smurfit European Open are the biggest Irish organizisations of the international golfgame.
In the last years Ireland was hostess of many sportgivings. The biggest one was the Organizisation of the Special Olympics in June 2003.

Wie gesagt, es muss nicht zu 100% richtig sein, wenn ihr korrigiert.

Es sollte nur weniger fehler enthalten als jetzt!

Wenn ihr mir helfen könnt, tut das bitte!...vorallem mit den prepositionen hab ich probleme.

HELP! Hilfe

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Ulli · Ehrenmoderator Anmeldungsdatum: 03.07.2004 Beiträge: 1389

Hi M.,

hätte dir schon längst geantwortet, hatte jedoch keinen Zugang zur Site. Hier nun mein Korrekturvorschlag:

About sport in Ireland

During the last years the success of Ireland at the world’s sport was unproportionally high in comprehension to/with the number of population.
Ireland had good results at the Olympic Games (in….Jahreszahl).
The favourite sports in Ireland are the traditional ball games such as Gaelic Football, Hurling (thats something like hockey) and Camogie (that´s Hurling for women).
Those games are nearly played all over Ireland.
The peaks of them are the final games , which take place in September in the Croke Park in Dublin.
Football is played by all age groups.
Ireland is a very good place for its outdoor* sports (im Freien: was heißt das?*) like hunting, shooting, fishing but also riding.
Because of the 3,000 km long coasts you can do either sailing or paddling .
There are more than 400 golf courses placed all over the country.
The Murphy´s Irish Open and the Smurfit European Open are the biggest Irish organizisations of the international golfgame.
Through the last years Ireland has been hostess of many sport events. The greatest one was the Organizisation of the Special Olympics in June 2003.

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