noch ein summary

Sleepy Hollow · Gast

Hallo,
ich habe noch einen kleinen summary geschrieben. Sprachlich eigentlich auf unterstem niveau, aber naja... wäre lieb wenn den jemand verbessern würde!

While Nate is on a sailing-trip with his friends, Blairis flirting with Paris 5, grandson of Paris 3. Her way of getting into Yale? At the same time is Serena looking at old pictures of Paris 3. with him in his library. Blair moved to the Plaza Hotel, because she needs space to learn and especially to meet hefself with Nate.
Jenny and Elise are at the Raves gig, pretending to be cool, bored models. At least, Jenny IS a model. Vanessa and her new (room)mate are just joining the gig for a few minutes, until they went on to an other party.

Ulli · Ehrenmoderator Anmeldungsdatum: 03.07.2004 Beiträge: 1389

Hi sleep hollow Wink

hier mein Korrekturvorschlag

While Nate is on a sailing-trip with his friends, Blairis is flirting with Paris 5, grandson of Paris 3. Her way of getting into Yale? At the same time Serena is looking at ancient pictures of Paris 3 with him in his library. Blair has moved to the Plaza Hotel, because she needs space to learn and especially to meet Nate.
Jenny and Elise are at the Raves gig (?), pretending to be cool, bored models. Finally Jenny is a model. Vanessa and her new (room)mate just join the gig for a few minutes, until they go to visit another party.

Vergleiche deinen Text mit meinem Vorschlag. Wink