Text für FH Aufnahmetest

maan446 · Anmeldungsdatum: 04.07.2011 Beiträge: 1

Hallo,

wenn Ihr Zeit habt, könntet Ihr ja mal kurz meinen Mustertext durchlesen und mir eure Meinung dazu sagen. (Grammatik, Zeit, Satzstellung, Vokabeln, ect.)

Die Aufgabenstellung lautet wie folgt:

A US multinational is considering locating a new manufacturing plant (Produktionsanlage)
in your city/town. Write a 140-160 word report on why your city/town would be suitable
for the plant and make a recommendation as to the best site for the new plant.

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Dear Sir or Madam,

i have heard that your Company expects to build a new Plant in Innsbruck. Austria is located in the central of Europe, next to Italy, Swizz, Germany, Hungary and Slovenia. Innsbruck has a very good infrastructure with many busses und a big train station. A vast number of logistic companies drive through Tirol and have often also offices here. A breath taking atmosphere with mountains all around you is a very beautiful place to be. The university hospital has an excellent reputation all around the world. Also plenty students from Austria, Italy and Germany come here to make there academic training. Austrians are very hardworking people with excellent technical skills. The Airport from Innsbruck is near the city. The planes there bring you all around the world. Munich, Zurich and Milano are also not far away from Innsbruck, it takes you about 1,5 to 3 hours by car to get there.

hanisepp · Anmeldungsdatum: 27.09.2011 Beiträge: 2

Also ich habe nicht den ganzen Text durchgelesen, aber mit ist das kleine I am Anfang und "Swizz" statt "Swiss" gleich aufgefallen. Company würde ich auch klein schreiben, Plant ebenfalls. Mit train station meinst du wohl railway station. Airport ist glaube ich auch klein zu schreiben. Den Satz gleich danach würde ich ganz weglassen (The planes...)

Edit: na gut jetzt habe ich den ganzen Text gelesen

Eris · Anmeldungsdatum: 25.08.2011 Beiträge: 73

Dear Sir or Madam,

I have heard that your Company expects to build a new Plant in Innsbruck in Austria, which is located in the centre of Europe, with its boarders to Italy, Switzerland, Germany, Hungary and Slovenia. Innsbruck has a very good infrastructure with many busses und a big train station. A vast number of logistic companies drive through Tirol and have often also offices here. A breath taking atmosphere with mountains all around you is a very beautiful place to be. The university hospital has an excellent reputation all around the world. Also plenty of students from Austria, Italy and Germany come here to make their academic training. Austrians are very hardworking people with excellent technical skills. The Airport from Innsbruck is near the city. The planes there bring you all around the world. Munich, Zurich and Milano are also not far away from Innsbruck, it takes you about one and a half to three hours by car to get there.

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There you go! Augenzwinkern

Allerdings ein Tipp: ich würde der Firma nicht explizit beschreiben, an welche Länder Österreich grenzt, schließlich scheinen sie schon zu wissen, wo das ist. Trotzdem habe ich es dir korrigiert, man kann ja nie wissen, wozu es nochmal gut sein wird.

P.S. Übrigens: es heißt auf Englisch "Milan".