Englisch Text Korrigieren

dzana · Anmeldungsdatum: 20.12.2010 Beiträge: 3

Meine Frage:
hallöchen smile

ich habe einen text geschrieben bzw. zusammenfassung
und ich bin mir auch sicher das da fehler sind:D
könnte jemand es korrigieren ?
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The Taylor-Burton Diamond

in South Africa was the pear-shaped diamond discovered and in 1969 it was in an auction.
Cartier bought it for over one million dollars.
Richard Burton on the very next day it was bought by the cartier and since then is the diamond "Taylor-Burton Diamond".
Elizabeth Taylor wore the diamond as the first for the 40th birthday.
They were often seen with the diamond and she loved it.
Taylor decided to sell the diamond for three million dollars after the decision in 1978.
a hospital was built with the money in Botswana, Africa.

Meine Ideen:
hmmm .. haha keine ahnung für idee :S

Violet · Gast

The Taylor- Burton Diamond

The pear-shaped diamond was first discovered in South Africa and later-1969- it was shown in an auction. A cartier bought it for over one million dollars. On the next day Richard Burton purchased it and since that the diamond is called "Taylor-Burton Diamond". E. Taylor wore the diamond for the first time at (on?) her 40th birthday. She was often seen with her beloved diamond. After the decision in 1978 she wanted to sell it for 3 million dollars. With the money a hospital in Botswana, Africa, was built.

Ich hoffe, das konnte helfen... Obwohl ich mir bei den Präpositionen nicht ganz sicher bin... Aber das wird schon! Prost

LG, Violet.