kurzer text

Gie · Gast

Hallo,

kann mir mal bitte jemand meine kurze Stellungnahme zu einem Text verbessern?
Wäre euch sehr dankbar!

My opinion is, that the text isn´t much to positive. Ok ,there are two important negative facts, which you should know: At first 96 workers died by the construction of the Hoover Dam. At second the dam destroyed the environment but now there are national parks which provides animals and plants life.
But there are more positive aspects
1. Hoover Dam was a workplace for many thousand people during the world economic crises.
2. The Colorado River needed to be controlled because it flooded law-lying farmlands in spring and summer and in the late summer there were to less water. So the construction was necessery.
3. It generates cheap hydroelectric power.
And you must think, that every building destroys a part of the environment.
So I mean, Hoover Dam is so important, that the positive aguments outweighs the negatives.

Vielleicht könnt ihr mir die Grammatik verbessern!? Hilfe

Gie · Gast

2 sachen sind mir selbst noch aufgefallen...

statt provides = protects

und statt outwights = outwight

Gast

Du hast ein sehr gutes Sprachgefühl. smile

Schad, dass sich da so ein paar unnötige Fehler einschleichen.

lg kiki

My opinion is, that the text isn´t much TOO positive. Ok ,there are two important negative facts, which you should know: FIRST OF ALL 96 workers died by the construction of the Hoover Dam. AND SECONDLY the dam destroyed the environment but now there are national parks which PROTECT FLORA AND FAUNA.
But there are more positive aspects
1. Hoover Dam was a workplace for many thousand people during the world economic crisIs.
2. The Colorado River needed to be controlled because it flooded lOw-lying farmlands in spring and summer and in the late summer there wAS TOO less water. So the construction was necessAry.
3. It generates cheap hydroelectric power.
And you must think, that every building destroys PARTS of the environment.
So I THINK, Hoover Dam is so important, that the ADVANTAGES outweigh the DISADVANTAGES.

kikira · Gast

Da hab ich noch einen Fehler übersehen:

TOO LITTLE Water

too less water würd heißen: zu weniger Wasser - Blödsinn