Help bitte English presentation korrigieren

Adnan_xD · Anmeldungsdatum: 24.11.2007 Beiträge: 3

Also ich wollt fragen ob ihr mir ein bischen helfen könnt also meine Presentation durchlesen und vielleicht bischen verbessern und paar vorschläge geben was ich verbessern könnte (Grammatik,Inhalt etc..).

Wer nicht weis was die Eurokom ist http://de.wikipedia.org/wiki/Eurokom
5Minuten lange Presentation:

Hier meine Presentation: Very Happy

Good Morning Mrs .... And Mrs ...
My name is .....

And now Im going to tell you something about my home country Bosnia and Hercegowina

so i dont want to throw the not very intresting and dry facts on you and i hope that you enjoy my presentation
lets begin

here is s little table of contents where you can see the main points of my presentaion:(INHALT ZEIGEN)

Now lets start with the frst point the

Verbessereungsvorschläge `?`?
-----Facts about Bosnia-----

Bosnia and Herzegovina is a country on the Balkan peninsula of Southern Europe with an area of about 50 000 square kilometres (so you can put baden-württemberg 2 times in it ). Around 4 million people live in Bosnia today.
The nation's capital and largest city is Sarajevo, which lies between several high mountains. Sarajevo was the host site of the Winter Olympic Games in 1984.
The majoritys of the Bosnian people are muslims.The others are serbian-orthodox or normal ktholiks(croats)
Bosnia borders the following coutries : Croatia ; Serbia ; Montenegro and small part to the Adriatic Sea.(KArte zeigen)
Bosnia has 2 kinds of climate :
the first in the north-part of Bosnia witth continental climate is marked by hot summers and cold, snowy winters.(karte zeigen : this is here in this area)
the south-part of Bosnia has got mediterranean climate with mild winters and constantly hot summers.

Was kommt da noch hin verbesserungsvorschläge Grammatik ???

-----The war in Bosnia ----

The war in Bosnia was one of the shady sides of the history of bosnia.It was a conflict between serbia nad bosnia and took place in the 90s.The war started in 1992 when Bosnia became independent from Yugoslavia.Serbia attacks Bosnia because many serbian people live in bosnia (Karte zeigen can you imagine?thats the same what hitler said :Where german peolple live it have to be germany)There were no rules the serbian army killed all muslim civilian people it doesn't matther if they were chilren or womens.I have a good example Srebrenica 1995 about 10 000 muslims were killed the whole town they were killed like the jews in the World war 2(here a picture).The Un (united Organisation) did nothing.Of course there were killed serbian peoples ,too.But not so many like the Bosnian.Overall it was a brutal war in the centre of Europe with many[Leid?;usw. Toten...] ``
200 000 innocent people lost their life. Do you know why ? Becuase they were muslims.

Zu unkonkrett??Grammatik Verbesserungvorschläge

---Culture/tourism--

Bosnia has a lot of nice parts but also very bad parts.If you walk trough the streets you will see for sure buildings like that(bilder zeigen)this is a typical style of Bosnia.
If you would like to go to Bosnia you have to see cities like Mostar or Sarajevo.I go every year to Bosnia in the town Mostar which is wonderful. there is the old bridge (here a picture . The bridge was about 500years old but they destroyed it in the bosnian war.they build the same bridge again iand the bridge looks exactly like the old-- by the way in the year 2005 I took part in a celebration of the bridge and I jumped down! ).In Mostar were many cafees where you can come for a coffe or a cup of tea.There are a lot of other sights like old mosques and churches.I can really recommend to spend a holiday there..A other nice town is Sarajevo the capital of Bosnia Sarajevo a town in the oriental style(here is a picutre).There are a lot of historical moqseus,chruches and jewish temples.There live 3 kinds of People Muslims,serbian-orthodox,and croatian people,thats why some people call it small-jerusalem.Overall is Sarajevo a nice town and the 43th [AUSPRACHE???]best citiy! ÜBERSETZUNG :LAUT DEM BEST CIIES BUCH]

Grammatik Verbesserungsvorschläge

-----My Life-----

I was born in 1992 in Bosnia while there was a brutal war .It was very hard for my family to educate and to feed me and my brother because there was nothing to eat and it was very dangoures and hard.We lived here (karte zeigen ) near the town mostar (here are some pictures of my house and mostar by the way took this pictures ).In the village were I lived were killed alll muslim people in the war ,I and my family had luck beacuse we were at my grandmothers house in the nothern of Bosnia when the war has started so we stay there the whole time in the war till 1994 !1994 was the year of hope for my family because this was the year when i migrate to germany. In these 2 years of war my family hadn`t got money and only with the help of other peoples we could live there.I'm happy that i cant remember this times because it could change my personality in all this trouble. My family saw that they had to escape from Bosnia.They decided to went to Germany.At the beginning we had a few new problems in Germany:first we didn't know if we can stay here for ever And the second:my parents didn't know if they can find ? A job here!?But we mastered the problems and I'm happy about it ! I think it was a good decision and im happy to live here because i have more oppurintys and I can design`[anderes Wort dafür] my future better than in bosnia.

Gramatik ? Verbesserungsvorschläge ``?

Well that was my presentation I hope you enjoyed it !!1

Verbesserungsvorschläge ?

For the End You can try a typical snack of Bosnia which is called "Baklava" and the brown-orange snack is called"Hurmasica" Now you can imagine how bosnia tasts bosnia:D

grammatik ??

Wär echt nett wenn mir jemand helfen könnte,muss am Dienstag die Presentation machen

Und bitte eure ehrliche Meinung ob ihr es interessant oder scheisse findet
und was man verbssern kann

MFG ADNAN

ann · Anmeldungsdatum: 25.11.2007 Beiträge: 3

So, viel kann ich Dir nicht helfen, aber vielleicht ein bisschen...

Bei einer Eurocom sollst du nicht viel um den heißen Brei reden. Deshalb: lasse den Satz "So I don't want to throw the not very interesting..." lieber weg.

Mal davon abgesehen, dass viele Wörter falsch geschrieben sind - wahrscheinlich sind das nur Tippfehler - ist die Präsentation gar nicht so schlecht.

Es heißt: Of course, there were Serbian people (ohne s!) killed, too.

The national's capital ..., which is situated between several high mountains.

The most of the Bosnian people are muslims.

The climate of Bosnia is different (ist glaub' ich besser als Bosnia has 2 kinds of climate):
In the North of Bosnia...

It didn't matter if they were children or women (ohne s!)

Heißt das nicht UNO (also United Nations Organization)???

(Overall würde ich weglassen) It was a brutal war in the centre of Europe with many pain and dead people.

200000 innocent people lost their lives.

If you visit Bosnia one day, it is a must to see cities like Mostar and Sarajevo.

I myself visit Bosnia every year. And I go to Mostar every year too. It is a wonderful town.

I took part at a celebration...

Das mit der 43th best city würde ich weglassen...

...dangerous...

...so we stayed there the whole time...

...only with the help of other people...

...that I can't remember this time....

...because it could have changed my personality...

...if they could get a job here...

...and I know, I'll have a better future here.

So, das waren meine Verbesserungsvorschläge, ich hoffe sie stimmen so! Wünsche dir viel glück für die eurocom, aber die geht auch rum, glaub' mir!

Adnan_xD · Anmeldungsdatum: 24.11.2007 Beiträge: 3

danke wirklich hast mir sehr geholfen ! Big Laugh

!

echt nett

Adnan_xD · Anmeldungsdatum: 24.11.2007 Beiträge: 3

danke hab ne 1.2 gekriegt

ann · Anmeldungsdatum: 25.11.2007 Beiträge: 3

super!