Personal Essay

Cedro_ · Anmeldungsdatum: 15.05.2008 Beiträge: 9

Hey dear forum,

I have already read a lot on this site, and I must admit that I appreciate the efforts of the members, to bring us a little a bit closer to (more or less) fluent English. I thought a lot about the topic of my essay. It should be something that you are please to read, something with tension or something funny. It’s hard to fit the individual needs of you, so I will just write something about the Law Of Attraction.
Because I think this topic is great to discuss.
I recently saw a lot of videos on other pages about the law of attraction. The key seems to be very plain. “If you think positive, positive things will happen to you”. Why is it like that? Well, the advocates say, that a positive attitude towards life and especially towards GOALS you set in your life, will attract positive things. There are a lot of famous “rise from rags to riches” representatives, who do believe in this concept, for instance Will Smith or Chris Gardner. Candidly, so do I.
I really believe that we can change our future in the way we want. But we have to trust ourselves and we have to believe in our skills. Maybe I can encourage you to do the things; you’ve ever wanted to do. My personal goal for instance is, to improve my English and to make me degree. I am struggling a lot at this moment, because a lot of people especially my profs. want to see me down, because I’m totally different to all the other students, external as well as internal. There will always be people who want to see you down, or who laugh at you. In these days people are afraid of someone who is different. Someone who still has got dreams(Has got umgansprachlich?). What about you, do you agree to the law of attraction?

So that’s my essay. By the way, I am a 20 years young man, who studies economy. I can’t afford a private teacher or something like that. But it is vital to have a good English knowledge in order to survive in this cold world
I hope someone can correct my mistakes or comment something else about my essay.

Wäre wie gesagt, super wenn ihr mir das mal korrekturlesen könnt. Ich hab schon mal gelesen, aber seine eigenen Fehler findet man ja selten.
grübelnd