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kathi* · Anmeldungsdatum: 16.02.2009 Beiträge: 1

hallo,

ich schreibe eine facharbeit über aids und habe einige probleme gehabt mit formulierungen, oder passende vokabeln zu finden
ich hoffe, dass jemand bereit dazu ist, sich meinen verfassten text durchzulesen und bei fehlern diese zu korrigieren,
vielen dank im voraus
smile

hier ist der text:
The biggest problem of the AIDS- medicines are the costs: a treatment
can exact more than 8.500 € in a year. In the most cases this prize is too much for the people who live in the developing countries, except for the rich.
Since the entering of new ARV- medicaments the number of the AIDS- dead persons incurred a big decrease. Nevertheless, the number of the HIV- infected persons is rising in the developing countries. A reason for this rising is the widespread opinion that HIV and AIDS are not longer a dangerous.
Lots of organizations push the government to elevate the issue for the education of AIDS with the reason that education is very important, especially for young people. American doctors reported 2001 that young people are sure of a cure of AIDS, but that is not the reality. A survey of the british charity organization “Terrence Higgins Trust” offered that nearly 75% of the adolescents opined that they were not enough cleared up about the risks of unharboured sex.
Today’s medicaments against HIV avoid the augmentation of the HIV and his distribution in the human organism, so that they can bring the disease in a certain way to a downtime. A HIV- infection means no longer a death sentence. A consistent therapy prolongates the life and corrects the quality of life.
To this day it is not possible to delete this virus completely and to eliminate it definitely from the body. The viruses are difficult vulnerable because they are changing their structures all the time. They can retire from the blood where they would be easy achievable into other heavy accessibly parts of the body and there they could devolve to a form of passive state. HIV and AIDS are so cureless. The persons concerned have to be combating lifelong.

English rose · Anmeldungsdatum: 17.02.2009 Beiträge: 3

Hi Kathi - dein Text

The biggest problem of AIDS- medicines are the costs: a treatment
can cost more than 8.500 € per year. In the most cases this price is too much for the people who live in developing countries, except for the rich.
Since the development of new ARV- medicaments the number of the AIDS- deaths significantlydecreased. Nevertheless, the number of the HIV- infected persons is rising in the developing countries. A reason for this increase is the widespread opinion that HIV and AIDS are no longer a danger.
Lots of organizations push the government to address the issue for the of AIDS educationbecause education is very important, especially for young people. American doctors reported in 2001 that young people are sure of a cure for AIDS, but that is not the reality. A survey by the british charity organization “Terrence Higgins Trust” reported that nearly 75% of the adolescents believed that they were not sufficiently informed about the risks of unprotected sex.
Today’s medicines for HIV avoid the augmentation of HIV and its distribution in the human organism, so that they can fight the disease in a certain way in a reduced time. An HIV- infection no longer means a death sentence. A consistent therapy prolongs life and improves the quality of life.
To this day it is not possible to destroy this virus completely and to fully eliminate it from the body. The virus is difficult to treat because it changes its structure all the time. It can retire from the blood where it would be easily accessible into other more hidden parts of the body where it can devolve to a passive state. HIV and AIDS are without cure. The people concerned have to fight it their whole lives.

mfg, rose
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