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Ok , lets write a big story ! 
Someone writes a sentence and the next one continues the story , I begin.
Once upon a time there was a little dwarf who lived in a dark cave but suddenly ....
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| Verfasst am: 21. Sep 2004 23:30 Titel: |
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... the cave was left open by the creatures, who fed him ...
BTW: Cool Idea!  |
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Ulli
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| Verfasst am: 22. Sep 2004 09:53 Titel: Re: Once upon a time ... |
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| gobbo hat Folgendes geschrieben: | Ok , lets write a big story !
Someone writes a sentence and the next one continues the story , I begin.
Once upon a time there was a little dwarf who lived in a dark cave but suddenly .... |
Hi gobbo,
I like your idea very much  , great. I'll try to continue the story.
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Ulli
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| Verfasst am: 22. Sep 2004 10:00 Titel: |
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... the cave was left open by the creatures, who fed him ...
delicious cheese muffins made by....
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gobbo
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| Verfasst am: 22. Sep 2004 14:31 Titel: |
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delicious cheese muffins made by....
...his very old grandmother who is normally sitting in a rocking chair close to the entrance but today she was ...
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Ulli
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| Verfasst am: 22. Sep 2004 15:08 Titel: |
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...his very old grandmother who is normally sitting in a rocking chair close to the entrance but today she was ...
...very busy baking for the guests which she had invited yesterday for the annual Halloween party at .....
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Lischen
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| Verfasst am: 26. Sep 2004 23:26 Titel: |
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| Zitat: | | ...very busy baking for the guests which she had invited yesterday for the annual Halloween party at ..... |
...Tubby's her favorite fast-food restaurant in 7th Street near the...
Ps What a great game  Love it... |
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| Verfasst am: 27. Sep 2004 09:51 Titel: |
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...Tubby's her favorite fast-food restaurant in 7th Street near the...
....graveyard where all her best friends were buried and where....
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| Verfasst am: 29. Sep 2004 11:20 Titel: |
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...graveyard where all her friends were buried and where...
...a nice dwarf whom she fancied was keeper of the keys. She used to visit him every week and during those visits... |
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Ulli
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| Verfasst am: 29. Sep 2004 12:56 Titel: |
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...graveyard where all her friends were buried and where...
...a nice dwarf whom she fancied was keeper of the keys. She used to visit him every week and during those visits...
....they made plans how they could get to the ....
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Lischen
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| Verfasst am: 29. Sep 2004 17:45 Titel: |
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| Zitat: | | ....they made plans how they could get to the .... |
...spring of eternal youth, which they read about in... |
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norb
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| Verfasst am: 29. Sep 2004 19:42 Titel: |
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| Lischen hat Folgendes geschrieben: | | Zitat: | | ....they made plans how they could get to the .... |
...spring of eternal youth, which they read about in... |
... an internet based bulletin board called "englischboard", where ... |
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| norb hat Folgendes geschrieben: | | Lischen hat Folgendes geschrieben: | | Zitat: | | ....they made plans how they could get to the .... |
...spring of eternal youth, which they read about in... |
... an internet based bulletin board called "englischboard", where ...
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.....all the magic hints were given they needed for their special...
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norb
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| Verfasst am: 03. Okt 2004 20:01 Titel: Once upon a time ... |
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Once upon a time there was a little dwarf who lived in a dark cave but suddenly the cave was left open by the creatures, who fed him delicious cheese muffins made by his very old grandmother who is normally sitting in a rocking chair close to the entrance but today she was very busy baking for the guests which she had invited yesterday for the annual Halloween party at Tubby's her favorite fast-food restaurant in 7th Street near the graveyard where all her best friends were buried and where a nice dwarf whom she fancied was keeper of the keys. She used to visit him every week and during those visits they made plans how they could get to the spring of eternal youth, which they read about in an internet based bulletin board called "englischboard", where all the magic hints were given they needed for their special ...
... plan. The little dwarf meanwhile, innocent as a child that he still was and unaware of
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| Verfasst am: 03. Okt 2004 20:27 Titel: |
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... the awaiting dangers ... |
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... the awaiting dangers ...
....he felt to come soon. That's why the little dwarf rushed to....
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| Ulli hat Folgendes geschrieben: | ... the awaiting dangers ...
....he felt to come soon. That's why the little dwarf rushed to....
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Tubby´s. Simmering with excitement at the thought of ... |
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...Tubby´s. Simmering with excitement at the thought of ...
....the arrival of the ten best-known and most feared....
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norb
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| Verfasst am: 04. Okt 2004 15:11 Titel: Once upon a time ... |
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....the arrival of the ten best-known and most feared....
... heckawhits and whickslingers who live in the dark woods east of Loch Darioth until ...
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Lischen
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| Verfasst am: 04. Okt 2004 16:03 Titel: |
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| Zitat: | | ... heckawhits and whickslingers who live in the dark woods east of Loch Darioth until ... |
... yesterday, when big, loud, stinky, fearfull ...
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norb
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| Verfasst am: 04. Okt 2004 17:22 Titel: Once upon a time ... |
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... yesterday, when big, loud, stinky, fearfull ...
Crooch delivered grandma´s invitation. Hastily ... |
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norb
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| Verfasst am: 18. Okt 2004 14:59 Titel: Once upon a time ... |
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| Zitat: | Prompter:
Couch - harruph - couch
Hastily .... 
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norb
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| Verfasst am: 27. Okt 2004 09:39 Titel: Once upon a time ... |
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Seems that the story goes down the  Bye! |
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Ulli
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| Verfasst am: 27. Okt 2004 10:53 Titel: story |
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You're right norb, that's what I've been thinking the last couple of days.
Maybe it's too much fantasy  , it's also hard for me to continue.
Let's wait another day...
LG Ulli
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norb
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| Verfasst am: 27. Okt 2004 14:57 Titel: Once upon a time ... |
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I´m just a bit disapointed. I must admit that I instantly fell in love with the concept and how the story was evolving. It´s sad that, without assistance of the others, the story will remain in the dark. The figures are not even half alive - yet not dead. I think they have a right to live! Call me romantic, but that´s just the way I feel about it. Nonetheless it´s not right to begin something and then leave it half finished.
It´s also been fun to test my limited English and improve it (again) sentence by sentence, idea by idea. I´d really appreciate it if someone could give the story a new chance. If it´s become too difficult, i´d suggest a twist in a way that enables us to discuss the story and it´s fate in a way that keeps the rule. Maybe like this:
Hastily ... . Ted, who had written the first sentences of his story within just a few minutes, paused, even held his breath, while he thought about how he could continue...
Let´s see .... |
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Thomas
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| Verfasst am: 27. Okt 2004 22:04 Titel: |
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I'm sorry, that i don't hace any clue how to continue. Perhaps we should translate it into german and then go on?
Greetings,
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Ulli
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| Verfasst am: 28. Okt 2004 10:08 Titel: Story |
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Perhaps it takes too much time to read the entire story before anyone has an idea how to continue?
LG Ulli
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norb
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| Verfasst am: 28. Okt 2004 14:28 Titel: Once upon a time ... |
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Maybe like this:
| Zitat: | Hastily ... . Ted, who had written the first sentences of his story within just a few minutes, paused, even held his breath, while he thought about how he could continue...
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but ... before poor Ted dies from asphyxiation ... let him take a deep breath while he starts reading:
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Once upon a time there was a little dwarf who lived in a dark cave but suddenly the cave was left open by the creatures, who fed him delicious cheese muffins made by his very old grandmother who is normally sitting in a rocking chair close to the entrance but today she was very busy baking for the guests which she had invited yesterday for the annual Halloween party at Tubby's her favorite fast-food restaurant in 7th Street near the graveyard where all her best friends were buried and where a nice dwarf whom she fancied was keeper of the keys. She used to visit him every week and during those visits they made plans how they could get to the spring of eternal youth, which they read about in an internet based bulletin board called "englischboard", where all the magic hints were given they needed for their special plan. The little dwarf meanwhile, innocent as a child that he still was and unaware of the awaiting dangers he felt to come soon. That's why the little dwarf rushed to Tubby´s. Simmering with excitement at the thought of the arrival of the ten best-known and most feared heckawhits and whickslingers who live in the dark woods east of Loch Darioth until yesterday, when big, loud, stinky, fearfull Crooch delivered grandma´s invitation. Hastily ...
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... having finally reached the end of the story´s first sentence Ted though: "What a monster! Seems that Molly Bloom inspired me". He smiled. "Or is this .. sort of a brain damage?"
... we could use *Ted* to explain things, think about, even delete parts of the story. Maybe we could use Hyperlinks to explain things. What is your opinion?? |
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Ulli
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| Verfasst am: 28. Okt 2004 16:45 Titel: story |
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Hi norb,
You're thinking a lot to improve the story's continuation, great. In my opinion it would be better to wait how everything will develop, on the other hand you shouldn't make it too difficult. Do you understand what I mean?
LG Ulli
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