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Luethien



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BeitragVerfasst am: 25. Feb 2007 01:53    Titel: BITTE KORRIGIERN!! Antworten mit Zitat

Hallo.

könnte bitte jemand den folgenden text kontrollieren.

die aufgabenstellung war, dass wir uns eine hilfsorganisation suchen sollten, die in afrika wasser projekte durchführt.

wäre wirklich nett, wenn sich jemand die zeit nimmt. DANKE im VORAUS.



Clean Water in Africa – an essential source of life

PWRDF

The Primate's World Relief and Development Fund (PWRDF) is the Canadian Anglican agency. They are for development, relief, refugees, and justice.
Their program consist the following parts:

Emergency Relief
Community Development
Human Rights, Peace-building
and Public Engagement.


In the Kimathi area they help to clean and rehabilitate springs. In Kiwakaria, they have always a muddied and polluted river. The water technician help to built a system, which helps to filter the water and bring it to one hundred families.
They laid water pipes from two springs to support a lot of households.
A pump was installed from one of these rivers to bring also water to people who live in villages that are uphill.
They also installed draw pipes to fill containers easier and timesaving.
Four water storage tanks help to catch the rain which runoff from roofs. They are also used as a sort of sign to educate and interest other villages.

The support of PWRDF has helped to reduce the average time to get water from about 3 hours to 45 minutes.

Villages, which have now a permanent source of water, begin to build tree nurseries and plant special forms of grass. They use the grass for the cattle as food. Another change is that they are able to increase their vegetable production.
Goldenhind
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BeitragVerfasst am: 25. Feb 2007 14:57    Titel: Re: BITTE KORRIGIERN!! Antworten mit Zitat

Luethien hat Folgendes geschrieben:
Clean Water in Africa – an essential source of life

PWRDF

The Primate's World Relief and Development Fund (PWRDF) is the Canadian Anglican agency. They are responsible for /They support development, relief, refugees, and justice.
Their program consists of the following parts:

Emergency Relief
Community Development
Human Rights, Peace-building
and Public Engagement.


In the Kimathi area they help to clean and rehabilitate springs. In Kiwakaria, there is a muddied and polluted river. The water technician helps to build (he she it das s muss mit!) a system, which helps to filter the water and bring it to one hundred families.
They laid water pipes from two springs to support a lot of households.
A pump was installed from one of these rivers to bring water to people who live in villages that are uphill also.
They also installed draw pipes to fill containers more easily and timesaving.
Four water storage tanks help to catch the rain which runs off from (the) roofs. They die Wassertanks? are also used as a sort of sign to educate and interest other villages.

The support of PWRDF has helped to reduce the average timeneeded to get water from about 3 hours to 45 minutes.

Villages, which have now a permanent source of water, begin to build tree nurseries and plant special forms of grass. They use the grass as food for cattle. Another change is that they are able to increase their vegetable production.
Jack
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BeitragVerfasst am: 25. Feb 2007 20:02    Titel: Antworten mit Zitat

Zitat:
A pump was installed from one of these rivers to bring water to people who live in villages that are uphill also.


Das "also" finde ich hier vom Klang her nicht ganz so passend, ich würde es eher durch "as well" ersetzen.

Zitat:
Four water storage tanks help to catch the rain which runs off from (the) roofs.


Die Konstruktion mit "runs off from" ist so meines Erachtens nicht korrekt, ich würde so etwas wie "to flow down" benutzen.
Luethien



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BeitragVerfasst am: 25. Feb 2007 22:11    Titel: Antworten mit Zitat

Danke für eure HILFE!!! Gott Gott
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