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| MI |
 Verfasst am: 30. Mai 2011 23:41 Titel: |
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Nur ein paar Kleinigkeiten sehe ich noch:
| Pablo hat Folgendes geschrieben: | Hier die neue Version:
I am going to tell you about my favourite show on TV: The Simpsons
I have watched it for many years and every day I am keen to watch a new episode. The Simpsons are a funny yellow family, who were created by Matt Groening, a comicdrawer. He had the idea for the Simpsons and drew them originally.
Homer is the most important charakter in the show. Hier könnte man bspw. wohl auch "on the show" sagen... fiel mir gerade so ein... He is the father of the Simpsons and he is a little bit fat and stupid. He works at a nuclear power station but he often sleeps a lot at work and eats a lot of donuts.
Every day new mistakes happen to him and this makes the show very funny. Beachte das Subjekt: "new mistakes happen" --> Homer ist das Objekt "to him", das Subjekt stellen "mistakes" - und das ist Plural!
His wife Marge is the mother of the Simpsons and she is very lovely and cares about the family and plays the role of the good mother.
Bart is the son and he is a mad guy. He does a lot of bad things and annoys his parents and teachers. He loves skateboarding and especially the boys who watch the Simpsons like him.
He is also my favourite charakter.
His sister Lisa is very smart and she learns a lot and has a really high IQ.
Her brother Bart annoys her often but she lets him get away with it, hoping to one day leave her home to study at university.
The last member of the family is a little baby called Maggie. She can't speak and is often with her mother because she is still very young.
The Simpsons live in Springfield and there are a lot of different people, too, who are also funny.
I couldn't imagine a world without the Simpsons and I hope that you have enjoyed my talk. |
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| Pablo |
| Verfasst am: 30. Mai 2011 12:07 Titel: |
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Hier die neue Version:
I am going to tell you about my favourite show on TV: The Simpsons
I have watched it for man years and every day I am keen to watch a new episode. The Simpsons are a funny yellow family, who were created by Matt Groening, a comicdrawer. He had the idea for the Simpsons and drew them orignally.
Homer is the most important charakter in the show. He is the father of the Simpsons and he is a little bit fat and stupid. He works at a nuclear power station but he often sleeps a lot at work an eats a lot of donuts.
Every day new mistakes happens to him and this makes the show very funny.
His wife Marge is the mother of the Simpsons and she is very lovely and cares about the family and plays the role of the good mother.
Bart is the son and he is a mad guy. He does a lot of bad things and annoys his parents and teachers. He loves skateboarding and especially the boys who watch the Simpsons like him.
He is also my favourite charakter.
His sister Lisa is very smart and she learns a lot and has a really high IQ.
Her brother Bart annoys her often but she lets him get away with it, hoping to one day leave her home to study at university.
The last member of the family is a little baby called Maggie. She can't speak and is often with her mother because she is still very young.
The Simpsons live in Springfield and there are a lot of different people too, who were also funny.
I couldn't imagine a world without the Simpsons and I hope that you have enjoyed my talk. |
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| Pablo |
| Verfasst am: 17. Mai 2011 21:31 Titel: |
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Danke dir, ich werde es nochmal überarbeiten und erneut reinstellen.
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| MI |
| Verfasst am: 17. Mai 2011 21:21 Titel: Re: Kleines Referat über eine TV-Show |
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Insgesamt gar nicht so schlecht. Es sieht nach viel aus, aber das meiste sind wirklich Kleinigkeiten und ein paar Verbesserungsvorschläge, um das ganze stilistische runder zu gestalten.
| Pablo hat Folgendes geschrieben: |
I am going to tell you about my favourite show on TV: The Simpsons.
I have watched it for many years and every day I am keen to watch a new episode. The Simpsons are a funny yellow family, who were created by Matt Groening, a comicdrawer. He had the idea for the Simpsons and drew them originally.
Let me introduce the characters:
Homer ist the most important character in the show. He ist the father of the family and he is a little bit fat and stupid. "thick" ist nicht "dick" im Sinne von Körperstatur, dazu muss man "big" oder "fat" benutzen. He works at a nuclear power station but he often sleeps at work and eats a lot of donuts. Every day, new mistakes happen to him and this makes the show very funny. Satzstruktur: Subject Verb Object ist fest und darf in der Reihenfolge nicht geändert werden.
His wife Marge is the mother of the Simpsons and she is very lovely and cares about the familiy and plays the role of the good mother.
Bart is the son and he is a mad guy. He does a lot of bad and funny things and annoys his parents an teachers at the same time. Bart loves skateboarding and especially boys who watch the Simpsons like him. "insbesondere/besonders" heißt "especially". "special" heißt "speziell" - nicht im Sinne von "besonders". He is also my personal favourite character and every day I am looking forward to his new jokes. "I am afraid" heißt eher "Angst haben".
His sister Lisa is very smart and she learns a lot and has a really high IQ. Her brother Bart annoys her often but she lets him get away with it, hoping to one day leave her home to study at university. Das ist ein Vorschlag. Sagt allerdings eher aus, dass sie ihn davonkommen lässt und eben gleichzeitig hofft wegzukommen von zu Hause.
The last member of the family is a little baby called Maggie. She can't speak and is often with her mother because she is still very young. "too young" ist nicht wirklich falsch, aber ich erwarte dann immer so etwas wie "zu jung, um zu..." und das ist hier nicht da, daher mein Vorschlag für eine Alternativkonstruktion.
The Simpsons live in Springfield and there are a lot of different people, too who are also funny.
The show has over 460 episodes and it is one of the most favourite comic shows all over the world. Das "favourite" gefällt mir da nicht wirklich, weil irgendwie ein bisschen das Bezugswort fehlt. Bin mir da aber nicht sicher - persönlich würde ich vermutlich eine Konstr. wie "watched" (meistgesehen) verwenden, was aber natürlich etwas leicht anderes aussagt...
In addition, many famous characters appeared in the show for example: the Rolling Stones, Arnold Schwarzenegger and Stephen Hawking.
I couldn't imagine a world without the Simpsons and I hope that you have enjoyed my talk. Die vorherige Konstruktion ist in dem Zusammenhang sehr unüblich. |
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| Pablo |
| Verfasst am: 16. Mai 2011 16:18 Titel: Kleines Referat über eine TV-Show |
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Hi MI,
wir sollen ein Referat über eine Show aus dem TV machen, die uns gefällt. Da ich nur die Simpsons gucke, kommt das nur für mich in Frage.
I am going to tell you about my favourite Show on TV: The Simpsons.
I have watched it for many years and every day I am keen to watch a new episode. The Simpsons are a funny yellow family who were created by Matt Groening an comicdrawer. He had the idea for the simpsons and drew them originally.
Let me introduce the characters:
Homer ist the most important character in the show. He ist the father of the family and he is a little bit thick and stupid. He works at a nuclear power station but he often sleeps at work and eats a lot of donuts. Every day happens him new mistakes and this makes the show very funny.
His wife marge is the mother of the simpsons and she is very lovely and cares about the familiy and plays the role of the good mother.
Bart is the son and he is a mad guy. He does a lot of bad and funny things and annoys his parents an teachers with it. Bart loves skateboarding and speacially the boys who watch the simpsons like him. He is also my personally favourite charakter and every day I am afraid of his new jokes.
His sister lisa is very smart and she learns a lot and has a really high IQ. Her brother Bart annoys her often but she [hier will ich sagen, dass sie es über sich ergehen lässt und hofft irgendwann weg zu sein von zu Hause und studieren zu können oder Ärztin werden zu können]
Also in the family there is a little baby called Maggie. She can't speak and is often with her mother because she is too young.
The Simpsons live in Springfield and there are a lot of different people to who are also funny.
The show has over 460 episodes and it is one of the most favourite comic shows all over the world.
There were also many famous charakters in the show for example: the rolling stones, arnold schwarzenegger and Stephen Hawking.
I couldn't imagine a world without the simpsons and I hope that my talk has pleased you. |
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