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| Jack |
 Verfasst am: 06. Feb 2007 17:45 Titel: |
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| Goldenhind hat Folgendes geschrieben: | | Wenn du schon Konjunktiv vorschlägst, sollte man aber gleich "if she were" sagen, das ist dann gehobener Stil. |
Joa stimmt, war etwas kaputt als ich das gepostet habe... |
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| SusiSroka |
| Verfasst am: 06. Feb 2007 08:41 Titel: |
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ich muss sagen die korrekturen die bereits vorgenommen wurden sind so in ordnung aber ich habe auch selbst ein kleines problem zu dem thema bildbeschreibung
es wäre schön wenn ihr mir da helfen könntet und zwar folgendes
wenn ihr zu den bildernvon John gast (american progress kann aber au manifest destiny heißen, steht im englischbuch von mir anders als in dem von meiner lehrerin deshal bin ich nicht so sicher) oder zu dem bild von john constable (the hay wain). wenn ihr zu den bildern informationen habt oder zu den artisten oder vielleicht schon fertige beschreibungen dann wäre es schön wenn ihr mir helfen würdet.
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| Goldenhind |
| Verfasst am: 04. Feb 2007 15:55 Titel: |
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| Zitat: | | It seems as if she was (eher "was" benutzen, da es im Konjunktiv stehen muss) |
Wenn du schon Konjunktiv vorschlägst, sollte man aber gleich "if she were" sagen, das ist dann gehobener Stil.
Im Übrigen kann man doch im Englischen vor Konjunktionen wie "but" oder "because" sehr wohl Kommata setzen. Man muss es nur nicht, aber im Englischen gibt es zur Zeichensetzung weniger strenge Regeln als im Deutschen. Relativsätze werden allerdings in der Tat in aller Regel nicht mit Kommata abgegrenzt.
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| Jack |
| Verfasst am: 04. Feb 2007 14:46 Titel: Re: bildbeschreibung - bitte um korrektur |
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Goldenhinds Korrekturen waren soweit OK, aber ein paar Dinge habe ich noch (habe Goldenhinds Kommentare aufgrund der Lesbarkeit hier entfernt):
| Goldenhind hat Folgendes geschrieben: | | The cartoon shows a woman (hier kein Komma setzen) who is sitting alone in a restaurant. There is another chair in front of her (hier gehört auch kein Komma hin) but nobody is sitting on it. In her right hand, she is holding a cup. She wears a brownish short dress, a yellow hat, which seems like a sun hat, a long green coat with a fur collar and a glove on the left hand. She does not wear a pantyhose (kein Komma) because one can see her legs under the table and they are very pale with shadows. Her face is a bit pale and she lays on make up. So her lips are conspicuously red, her eyes are easy stressed with eye-shadow and her cheeks are with a bit powder. She is looking down at the cup. It seems as if she was (eher "was" benutzen, da es im Konjunktiv stehen muss) absent from reality. She seems to be sad and very thoughtful. The background is passable empty and dim. There is a window in whose window- still you can see a basin filled with fruits (Der Satz erschließt sich mir gar nicht richtig... was sollte er denn auf Deutsch heißen?). In the dimmed window, the light from the restaurant is reflected. A heating stands in the left corner of the picture (Die andere Konstruktion war viel zu umständlich). There is also a second window on the left side of the picture. It is very dim like the first window (das "too" ist überflüssig). Therefore, I reckon that it is evening or maybe night. |
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| Goldenhind |
| Verfasst am: 04. Feb 2007 13:54 Titel: Re: bildbeschreibung - bitte um korrektur |
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| Liane hat Folgendes geschrieben: | The cartoon shows a woman, who is sitting alone in a restaurant. There is another chair in front of her, but nobody is sitting on it. In her right hand she is holding a cup. She wears a brownish short dress, a yellow hat, which seems like a sun hat, a long green coat with a fur collar and a glove on the left hand. She does not wear a pantyhose, because one (you ist etwas umgangssprachlich) can see her legs under the table and they are very pale with shadows.Ich frage mich, ob es wichtig ist u erwähnen, was sie nicht trägt... Her face is a bit pale and she lays on make upwenn sie sich gerade schminkt besser present progressive, wenn sie Make Up drauf hat, present perfect. So her lips are conspicuously red, her eyes are easy stressed with eye-shadow and her cheeks are hier fehlt wohl ein Partizip? with a bit powder. She is looking down at the cup. It seems as if she is absent from reality. She seems to be sad and very thoughtful. The background is passable empty and dim (Soll das eine Aufzählung sein? Dann fehlen Kommas. Falls "passable" sich auf "empty" beziehen soll, musst du ein Adverb benutzen). There is a window, on whose window- still you can see a basin filled with fruits. In the dimmed window the light from the restaurant is reflected. A heating stands in the picture on the left side in the corner. There is also a second window on the left side of the picture. It is very dim like the first window, too. Therefore I reckon that it is evening or maybe night.
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| Ulli |
| Verfasst am: 04. Feb 2007 11:11 Titel: Re: bildbeschreibung - bitte um korrektur |
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| Liane hat Folgendes geschrieben: | hi,
wir sollen eine bildbeschreibung zu dem bild automat, 1927. Des Moines Art Center, Iowa. Ich würde mich über weitere ideen und verbesserungen freuen.
The cartoon shows a woman, who is sitting alone in a restaurant. There is another chair in front of her, but nobody is sitting on it. In der right hand she is helding a cup. She wears a brownish short dress, a yellow hat, which seems like a sun hat, a long green coat with a fur collar and a glove on the left hand. She does not wear a pantyhose, because you can see her legs under the table and they are very pale with shadows. Her face is a bit pale and she lays on make up. So her lips are conspicuous red, her eyes are easy stressed with eye-shadow and her cheeks are with a bit powder. She is looking down at the cup. It seems as if she is absent from the reality. She seems to be sad and very thoughtful. The background is passable empty and dim. There is a window, on whose window- still you can see a basin filled with fruits. In the dimed window the light from the restaurant is reflected. A heating stands in the picture on the left side in the corner. There is also a second windwo on the left side in the picture. It is very dim like the first window, too. Therefore I reckon that it is in the evening or maybe at night.
danke |
Hallo Liane,
Tipps und Beispiele zur Bildbeschreibung findest du unter
http://www.ego4u.de/de/cram-up/writing/picture-description |
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| Liane |
| Verfasst am: 03. Feb 2007 19:08 Titel: bildbeschreibung - bitte um korrektur |
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hi,
wir sollen eine bildbeschreibung zu dem bild automat, 1927. Des Moines Art Center, Iowa. Ich würde mich über weitere ideen und verbesserungen freuen.
The cartoon shows a woman, who is sitting alone in a restaurant. There is another chair in front of her, but nobody is sitting on it. In der right hand she is helding a cup. She wears a brownish short dress, a yellow hat, which seems like a sun hat, a long green coat with a fur collar and a glove on the left hand. She does not wear a pantyhose, because you can see her legs under the table and they are very pale with shadows. Her face is a bit pale and she lays on make up. So her lips are conspicuous red, her eyes are easy stressed with eye-shadow and her cheeks are with a bit powder. She is looking down at the cup. It seems as if she is absent from the reality. She seems to be sad and very thoughtful. The background is passable empty and dim. There is a window, on whose window- still you can see a basin filled with fruits. In the dimed window the light from the restaurant is reflected. A heating stands in the picture on the left side in the corner. There is also a second windwo on the left side in the picture. It is very dim like the first window, too. Therefore I reckon that it is in the evening or maybe at night.
danke |
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