Textkorrektur wäre nice

Maxe · Anmeldungsdatum: 06.09.2005 Beiträge: 19

Hi,
könnt ihr mir bitte die fehler korrigieren, die ihr seht?! Das wäre sehr nett!
Wenn es nicht zu 1oo% stimmt, ist das kein problem! Jeder fehler, der verbessert wird, hilft mir!

The rise in foreign travel means that more tourists come in our country and that a lot of German people travel in foreign countries.
This trend affects our country´s culture in this way, that we try to change our lifestlye to the one from the people who visit our country. e.g :We open a lot of shops with their food and their clothes.We do this to become more hospitably and the consequence should be that our country becomes more attractive for the other people. I think the rise in foreign travel leads to more diversity but if we haven´t a control about this it could be a danger for us and our country. e.g: because of the terrorism.
The developments in communications changes our lifestyle in this way, that we watch TV/listen to the Radio/do sth. on the pc much more time then in the past. I think some of us are addicted by them. But I think it´s good for our culture if we want to have information about the rest of the world. So we aren´t only concentrated by ourselfes. And it´s necessary for the health of the people because when there is a illness in a country we are well-informed and can help there but also start a prevention in Germany.
My opinion is, that the growth in the power of international companies isn´t good for our culture and it isn´t a good diversity because the companies have so much money and want to get still more money. They influence the people too much and smaller companies haven´t chances on the market. That´s not good for the economy and the culture. But it is a good rank for Germany if we have manufacturing for the companies because this brings money and we need money.

Please help lg

chibimalik · Anmeldungsdatum: 15.05.2005 Beiträge: 91 Wohnort: USA

The rise in foreign travel means that more tourists come to our country and that a lot of German people travel to foreign countries.
This trend affects our country´s culture in the way, that we try to change our lifestyle to the one from the people who visit our country. e.g :We open a lot of shops with their food and their clothes.We do this to become more hospitable and the consequence should be that our country becomes more attractive for other people. I think the rise in foreign travel leads to more diversity but if we don't have control about this it could be a danger for us and our country. e.g: because of terrorism.
The developments in communications change our lifestyle in the way, that we spend more time watching TV/listening to the radio/doing sth. on the pc than in the past. I think some of us are addicted to these things. But I think it´s good for our culture if we want to have information about the rest of the world. So we aren´t only concerned with ourselves. And it´s necessary for the health of people because when there is an illness in a country we are well-informed and can help there but also start a prevention in Germany.
My opinion is, that the growth in the power of international companies isn´t good for our culture and it isn´t a good diversity because the companies have so much money and want to get even more money. They influence people too much and smaller companies haven´t got chances on the market. That´s not good for the economy and the culture. But it is a good rank for Germany if we have manufacturing for the companies because this brings money and we need money.

Maxe · Anmeldungsdatum: 06.09.2005 Beiträge: 19

thanks a lot! smile

chibimalik · Anmeldungsdatum: 15.05.2005 Beiträge: 91 Wohnort: USA

you're welcome Wink