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Mara
Anmeldungsdatum: 20.11.2012
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 Verfasst am: 20. Nov 2012 21:47 Titel: Bitte um Korrektur meines Textes |
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Meine Frage:
Hallo , könnte mir bitte jemand meine Fehler korrigieren oder mich darauf aufmerksam machen und kurz rüber schauen ?
Wollte ungefähr morgen so mein Referat vortragen.
Engineering Europe
Technology is not just our mobile phone or the internet . It is more . We need technology for our live. If we had not technology , we would not live like now. For example Engineer need the computer , because everything is done first on the computer , from the design to simulations of what a project will do to the environment . If we had not computers , we would not have some bridges and tunnels like the Oresund Bridge and the Oresund Tunnel , which link Denmark and Sweden . The idea of this bridge and tunnel goes back to the 19th century , but the technology that made it possible was only developed at the end of the 20th century .
The Oresund tunnel is 4 km long and includes a road , a railway and a service tunnel.
The Oresund bridge is more than 7800 m long and have 2 levels ? one for trains and one for cars. It reduces travel between Copenhagen and Malmo by more than one hour.
All big projects are built by international teams . Without English , they would probably have built a bridge and a tunnel that did not meet.
The opinions about such big projects are divided . Some people are of the opinion that it is a good project because sweden is closer to the rest of europe and the 5 years of building work gave 100s of jobs . For example people from spain came and get a well-paid jobs . .
Other people are of the opinion that its a bad idea because the bridge and tunnel destroy the sea life and the criminals move freely . They think the money was needed for other things.
Of course technology changed our live. My opinion about that is , that people can better move from sweden to denmark. It makes our live easier. Bridges and tunnels are very important , because we had to move detours.
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chocolate4ever
Anmeldungsdatum: 09.04.2008
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| Verfasst am: 25. März 2013 01:47 Titel: Re: Bitte um Korrektur meines Textes |
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| Mara hat Folgendes geschrieben: | Meine Frage:
Hallo , könnte mir bitte jemand meine Fehler korrigieren oder mich darauf aufmerksam machen und kurz rüber schauen ?
Wollte ungefähr morgen so mein Referat vortragen.
Engineering Europe
Technology is not just our mobile phone or the internet . It is more . We need technology for our live. If we had not technology , we would not be living like now. For example engineers need the computer , because everything is done first on the computer , from the design to simulations of what a project will do to the environment . If we didn't have computers , we would not have some bridges and tunnels like the Oresund Bridge and the Oresund Tunnel , which link Denmark and Sweden . The idea of this bridge and tunnel goes back to the 19th century , but the technology that made it possible was only developed at the end of the 20th century .
The Oresund tunnel is 4 km long and includes a road , a railway and a service tunnel.
The Oresund bridge is more than 7800 m long and has 2 levels ? one for trains and one for cars. It reduces the journey time between Copenhagen and Malmo by more than one hour.
All big projects are built by international teams . Without English , they would probably have built a bridge and a tunnel that did not meet. willst du sagen, dass die Brücke und der Tunnel nicht zusammen gepasst hätten?
The opinions about such big projects are divided . Some people have the opinion that it is a good project because Sweden is closer to the rest of Europe and the 5; Zahlen bis zehn werden ausgeschrieben, besser bis zwanzig years of building work gave 100s; auch hundreds wird ausgeschrieben of jobs . For example people from Spain came and get a; s ist singular, aber jobs ist plural; 'a' wird weg gelassen well-paid jobs . .
Other people have the opinion that it's a bad idea because the bridge and tunnel destroy the sea life and the criminals move freely . They think the money was needed for other things.
Of course technology changed our life; lives. My opinion about that; kann weg gelassen weren is , that people can move better from Sweden to Denmark. It makes our life easier. Bridges and tunnels are very important , because we had to move detours; der Teil ist mir unklar; was möchstest du ausdrücken?.
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choco
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