Dominik
Gast
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 Verfasst am: 21. Feb 2011 11:02 Titel: Sehr sehr sehr dringende Hilfe gesucht!!! |
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Hi leute, 
gestern hatte ich ja schonmal einen Brief geschrieben und MI hat ihn
mir ja super Korrekturgelesen.
Nun habe ich seine Bemerkungen mal versucht so gut es ging
umzusetzen und nachfolgender Brief ist dabei herausgekommen.
Nur müsste ich wissen ob er gut geworden ist. 
Bitte korregiert ihn mir so schnell es nur geht, da ich morgen
(Dienstag den 22.02.11) eine Englisch Klausurarbeit über dieses
Thema schreibe.
Ich bedanke mich schon mal im voraus.
mfg Dominik
Hier nun mal der Brief:
Dear ... ... .02.2011
I enjoy my holiday here in London very well.
The weather is good and I have senn many
sights. Now I want to give you some little
informations about the sights I´ve visited.
On my first day in London I went to my hotel
and unpacked my suitcase. After that I went to
the swimming pool of the hotel and enjoyed my
first day.
At the second day I went to the Tower of London.
They built it in the year 1078 and it began with a
singal Tower, the Withe Tower. At the Tower you
can see the beautiful Crown Jewels. I take many
photographs about them to show you the crons,
swords and rings. The Ravens which are flying at
the Tower of London are not as big as I thought.
Did you know that the Tower of London was used
as a state prison?
At my third day I went to the Houses of Parliament
and Big Ben. The Houses were built between
1840 and 1870. Radical Catholics wanted to blow
up the Houses of Parliament. Beg Ben is just a
bell not a Tower. The bell weighs 13800kg. Did
you know these two facts?
The fourth day was very exciting for me. I have seen
Buckingham Palace. It has 775 rooms and was built
from Duke of Buckingham in the 18th century. At
11.30 p.m. the Guards change. It is very interesting
to see how the Guards move and listen to the music
they play.
The fifth day was a religious day for me. I visited
Westminster Abbey. It was built between the 13th and
16th century and is the biggest Anglican church.
In Britain it is the most visited church. They have
a school too. This school is named Westminster
School.
My last sight, which I have seen today is Trafalgar
Square and Nelsons Column. The Square was
designed by John Nash and built between 1758 to
1805. The column on it is just five meters high.
Trafalgar Square is a place for many street protests.
Now I pack my suitcase and went to a good restaurant
here in London. I hope you will be fine. Please give my
regards to father, grandmother and grandfather.
These are the sights which I have seen here in London.
Tomorrow I will come back to Germany. I hope this letter
could inform you about the most important sights.
I am looking forward to see you again.
Best wishes
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Danke für eure Hilfe.
Ich bin jedem für seine Verbesserungsvorschläge dankbar!!! |
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| Verfasst am: 21. Feb 2011 15:46 Titel: |
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Ich mach dann einfach mal ein bisschen weiter.
Kommasetzung habe ich jetzt kaum beachtet, da ich da selbst die Regeln nicht ganz so gut kenne.
Hoffe ansonsten, nicht zu viel wesentliches übersehen zu haben und nichts verschlimmbessert zu haben  .
Gruß
MI
| Dominik hat Folgendes geschrieben: |
Dear ... ... .02.2011
I enjoy my holiday here in London very much. Much ist viel geläufiger. The weather is good and I have seen many sights. Now I want to give you some information about the sights I´ve visited. "information" ist eines der wenigen Wörter, was sowohl im Singular, als auch im Plural gleich ist. "some little" ist dann in diesem Kontext doppelt.
On my first day in London I went to my hotel and unpacked my suitcase. After that I went to the swimming pool of the hotel and enjoyed my first day.
During my second day I went to the Tower of London. Da bin ich mir nicht ganz sicher, ob deine Version nicht auch irgendwie ginge, aber "during" hört sich wesentlich besser an They built it in the year 1078, beginning with a signal Tower, the White Tower. At the Tower you can see the beautiful Crown Jewels. I took many photographs of them to show you the crowns, swords and rings. The Ravens which are flying around the Tower of London are not as big as I thought. Did you know that the Tower of London was used as a state prison?
At my third day I went to the Houses of Parliament and Big Ben. The Houses were built between 1840 and 1870. Radical Catholics wanted to blow up the Houses of Parliament. Beg Ben is just a bell, not a Tower. The bell weighs 13800kg. Did you know these two facts?
The fourth day was very exciting for me. I have seen Buckingham Palace. It has 775 rooms and was built by Duke of Buckingham in the 18th century. Die Unterschiede zwischen from, of, by scheinen nicht ganz klar. "from" ist häufig räumlich gemeint, "of" z.B. im Sinne von "It's the castle of the queen" (zum Beispiel immer dann, wenn man das Wort als Genitiv schreiben kann!) und "by" meistens nach Verben, die eine Art "Schöpfung" darstellen. "constructed by, build by, written by, painted by", etc. At 11.30 p.m. the Guards change. It is very interesting to see how the Guards move and listen to the music
they play.
The fifth day was a religious day for me. I visited Westminster Abbey. It was built between the 13th and 16th century and is the biggest Anglican church. In Britain it is the most visited church. They have a school too. This school is named Westminster School.
My last sight, which I have seen today is Trafalgar Square and Nelson's Column. The Square was designed by John Nash and built between 1758 and 1805. The column on it is just five meters high. Trafalgar Square is a place for many street protests.
Now I am packing my suitcase and I'll go to a good restaurant here in London. I hope you are fine. Please give my regards to father, grandmother and grandfather. Die Zeiten hier sind nicht so glücklich. Im ersten Teil hätte ich, wegen des "now" ein present progressive benutzt. Simple present könnte man vllt. auch noch vertreten. Die Past-Form im zweiten Satz geht aber sicherlich nicht, da du das vermutlich noch machen willst. Ebenso verwendete ich eine Present-Form für den zweiten Satz.
These are the sights which I have seen here in London. Tomorrow I will come back to Germany. I hope this letter could inform you about the most important sights. Klingt komisch, würde ich so nicht schreiben - eher "I hope this letter informed you about..."
I am looking forward to seeing you again.
Den habe ich gestern übersehen. Nach "to look forward to" steht der Gerund.
Best wishes
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