Comment- ist das grammatikalisch alles richtig?

Loaded369 · Anmeldungsdatum: 09.01.2011 Beiträge: 1

Ich bin nicht allzu gut in der englischen Sprache, deshalb benötige ich eure unterstützung! Könnt ihr mir helfen und mir erklären und sagen ob das so alles richtig ist? Danke schonmal im vorraus...

We all live in a beautiful world with many differences, for example: There are rich and healthy people and unfortunately also poor and sick people on our planet. Not everyone can decide where there want to live… To these propositions I would like to discuss in the following different arguments.
Fortunately we can choose our preferred lifestyle. Currently my family and I have an urban lifestyle. I feel very comfortable here in our capitol Berlin.
The most important thing in an urban lifestyle is a safe neighbourhood. I could not sleep very well, if I know that my neighbourhood is not safe. I think this is the foundation to feel good at home. Another important point for me is an attractive nightlife. I often go with my friends in nightclubs or bars. Sometimes I go to football games or concerts of famous bands. These cultural opportunities are very significant and typically for an urban lifestyle.
I believe that the lifestyle changes with the continuous age. Later, good schools and nice playsgrounds for my children could be more important than today.
I know that life without these things. I grew up in a rural lifestyle. Now, I can not imagine still living there. Of course, a rural lifestyle also has many advantages, for example: a healthy environment. Iam very certain that this does not seems very important for young people like me…
My preferences are also sport activities. If you ask me where I prefer to exercise my activities I would answer: In a city you have more opportunities for your activities.
After I reaches my A-Level, I want to go to New Zealand for one year. I will know new experiences about the culture and the lifestyle. I am very excited about this and I am already looking forward to it…
If you are getting older, you would looking for a place to relax and enjoy the silencec.