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SteffenHill93
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 Verfasst am: 08. Dez 2009 18:55 Titel: Bitte koregieren |
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Bitte nach der Zeit und satzb au schaun, Zeit sollte Simplre Present sein. Danke
Hab die mal geshrieben bitte verbessern wenn Fehler vorhanden sind bitte ist wichtig.
Könnte ich die Zusammenfassung noch etwas länger machen, ist die Zeit Simple Presente eingehalten?
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| Zitat: | The Story is about a girl, who gets a mail from a unknown boy from the internet. They started to exchange emails. The get good friends and talking about everything the want to know about the other-
A gril gets a mail from a unknown boy from the internet. For the first time they writing two times the week, but then they write two - three times the day. They write about everything they want to know about the other, and so they know all about the other and get very good friends. But they have never meet and so they dont know how the other person looks like. They only can makle a good impression on the other.
But suddenly he does not write any more to her. She is watining a fews weeks but she doesnt get any mail from him. She is very disapointet and angry. After this time she stop writing emails to anyone she dont know, she goes back to wrti letters with pen and paper.
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Bitte verbessern  Danke |
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Gast
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| Verfasst am: 10. Dez 2009 14:48 Titel: |
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Geh doch den Text selbst erstmal durch. Schon in der ersten Zeile ist eine Verbform in der falschen Zeit. Die Verbformen durchgehen, anschauen, sich fragen, ist das Simple present? ja? nein?... das kannst du ja wohl noch selbst!
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tippi
Gast
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| Verfasst am: 10. Dez 2009 20:23 Titel: Re: Bitte koregieren |
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The Story is about a girl, who gets receives a mail from an unknown boy from the internet. They started to exchange emails. They get become good friends and talking about everything the want to know about the other- each other
A gril girl gets receives a mail from a unknown boy from the internet. For the first time At first they writing two times the week, but then they write two - three times the day. They write about everything they want to know about the other each other, and so they know all about the other and get become very good friends. But they have never meet and so they don't know how what the other person looks like. They only can can only makle a good impression on the other one.
But suddenly he does not write back any more to her anymore. She is watining waits a fews weeks but she doesn't get receive any mail from him. She is very disapointet disappointed and angry. After this time experience she stops writing emails to anyone she doesnt know, she goes back to wrti writing letters with pen and paper.
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