Hilfe: Essay about an English language program.

Sven · Gast

Hallo,

ich habe die Aufgabe ein Essay über ein selbstgewähltes Sprachprogramm zu schreiben. Habe dies versucht, siehe unten.

Bitte helft mir, denn ich glaub, dass dort grobe Fehler haben könnte und bin mir einfach unsicher, wie der Text so ist und welche Fehler dort so "schlummern". Jede Anmerkung oder Korrektur würde ich sehr freuen.

Vielen Dank im voraus an alle, die mir helfen.

VG
Sven

Mein Textt:

Now, I am in my final year at the University of Berlin. After my degree in business, I am going to work in an ungarian bank. The bank employs a staff of over 14 000 in more than 80 countries and 140 locations. Therefore is the company language English. After a few years as a relationship manager, I would like to work in NY.
If you want to work in NY, on the one hand, you have to speak English very well and on the other hand, you need job experience. I think the job experience is a question of time. The skill to speak English very well is training and hard work.
The best prepration for the next carreer step is to take an English language program to improve my English.
I would like to apply a summer English program of the English Language Institute of the Berkeley University of California. This intensive course takes 4 weeks and is a focus on all areas of Englisch: reading, writing, spaeking, listening and grammar. The lessons are in the morning and in the afternoon. The classes will end at 16:30 pm. There are for the summer student serveral dorms close to the Berkely Campus.
Furthermore, many long-term students leave the campus during the summerterm break and they rent their accommodation.
You have several fees, for instance Campus Fee, course material, course fee. All in one, you should calculate 500 USD per week without living costs and accommodation. One advantage to choose a programm at Berkely is you have intensive time in a foreign country, everybody speaks English and you have to speak English. Second, you have very well educated instructors and can motivate the students and explain very well. Finally, if you pass this couse you have improved your English and have a certificate from an international known University for your CV. In contrast, there are the high fees and the time, which you have spent on one block.
Summing up, I would prefer this course because I like the state California and the area around San Francisco. Defintely, an intensive English course at an internationl University, like Berkely, you will have below the line an advantage for your development and for a next carreer step.

Leni · Gast

I am in my final year at the University of Berlin. I am going to work for an Hungarian bank when I will have completed my Degree in Business--> to complete one's degree. The bank employs more than 14,000 staff members in over 80 countries and 140 locations. That is why the company introduced English as its standard language. After having worked as relationship manager for a few years, I would like to work in New York.
I am aware of the fact that, on the one hand, you will have to speak English fluently, and on the other hand, you will need work experience, if you want to work in New York. I think that job experience is merely a matter of time. However, in order to speak English very well you need to work hard and exercise a lot.
The best preparation for my next career step is to take an English language course in order to improve my English.
I would like to apply for a summer English program of the English Language Institute of the Berkeley University of California. This intensive course takes 4 weeks and focuses on all areas of the English language: reading, writing, speaking, listening and grammar. The lessons are in the morning and in the afternoon. The classes end at 16:30 pm. There are several dorms close to the Berkeley Campus for summer students.
Furthermore, many long-term students leave the campus during the summer term break and rent their accommodations.
Expenses you will have to take into account are for instance the Campus Fee, course material and the course fee. Altogether, you should calculate 500 USD per week without living costs and accommodation. One advantage to choose a program at Berkeley is that you are able to spend much time in a foreign country. Everybody speaks English and you have to speak English, too. Furthermore, at Berkeley work very well educated instructors, who can motivate their students and explain the English language very well. In the end, if you pass this course you will have improved your English. Additionally, you will get a certificate from an international known University for your CV. Yet, in contrast to this there are the high fees and the time, which you have to spend on one term.
Summing up, I would prefer this course because I like the state California and the area around San Francisco. And an intensive English course at an international University like Berkeley, can certainly give you an advantage for your own development as well as for your future career.