Ein kleiner Text der gerne kontrolliert werden möchte :-)

Hansy · Anmeldungsdatum: 22.01.2006 Beiträge: 46

Hi,

ich wollte nur fragen ob ihr mir kurz folgen Text kontrollieren könntet. Hilfe

HANSY’S SHOE HOTEL

1. You have not so much time in the holidays, your shoe stink or your shoe is damaged?
2. So you can give us you shoe and we will give him food and a sunny room.
3. We also will repair them and that excellent service only for little money.
4. We have a lot of sport activities. For example you shoe can play Tennis or play football.
5. At the evening your shoe can relax at our Cinema or at the pool.
6. Our hotel is for every people. For our seniors we have Casino. For our kids we have a special area. And for our sport fans we have a lot of sport activities.
7. And at the beach in the near your shoe can relax the sunshine.
8. If you're interested in this job call me.

PS: Ich danke jetzt schon mal dem jenigen der mir hilft. Thumbs up!

mfg
hansy

Ukkat · Gast

hi hansy.

na da helf ich doch gerne.

1. You have not so much time in the holidays, your shoe stink or your shoe is damaged?

...You do not have....
....your shoes stink or your shoes are damaged.

Bin mir sicher, dass du nicht nur einen Schuh hast oder?!
ich versteh den Sinn des letzten Teils aber noch net.

2. So you can give us you shoe and we will give him food and a sunny room.

Vermeide so Satzanfänge wie "So!", weil das so nach einem "Also ich mach ...." klingt.
...you can give us your shoes and we will give them ...

3. We also will repair them and that excellent service only for little money.

we will also repair them...
...and that excellent service will only cost a little.

4. We have a lot of sport activities. For example you shoe can play Tennis or play football.

..We can offer a lot of different sport activities such as playing tennis and fooball...

5. At the evening your shoe can relax at our Cinema or at the pool.

...In the evening ...
cinema wird immer klein geschrieben

6. Our hotel is for every people. For our seniors we have Casino. For our kids we have a special area. And for our sport fans we have a lot of sport activities.

Our hotel is made for everyone...
There is a Casino for our seniors and a special area ( näher bestimmen ) for our children.

7. And at the beach in the near your shoe can relax the sunshine.

We also have a beach nearby where your shoe can relax in the sunshine...

8. If you're interested in this job call me.

If you are interested in this job, please call me.

Mir ist aufgefallen, wenn du das mit dem Shoe die ganze Zeit im Singular lässt, dann gehts durchaus.
hab mich nur gewundert!!!

Hansy · Anmeldungsdatum: 22.01.2006 Beiträge: 46

Danke!

Danke DIR Ukkat Mit Zunge

Ulli · Ehrenmoderator Anmeldungsdatum: 03.07.2004 Beiträge: 1389

@Ukkat und Hansy: zu Satz 1: on the holidays.... LOL Hammer

Gast

Ulli · Ehrenmoderator Anmeldungsdatum: 03.07.2004 Beiträge: 1389

kikira · Gast

Es heißt: IN your holidays

aber: to go ON holidays

lg kiki