 Verfasst am: 01. Apr 2010 11:56 Titel: corrections |
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| Starts ok but then... My responsibilities included the planning and execution of sales forecasts, training for new staff and customer care. These skills would enable me to deal with clients’ needs effectively. Besides that, I am presently studying Industrial Management at the University of Applied Science in Vienna and I will have my bachelor degree in 1 month. With my studies I have been able to strengthen my economic and industrial knowhow, so my qualifications match your requirements precisely. I would be very grateful for the opportunity to meet you. For further information, please feel free to contact me at anytime. Yours sincerely |
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| Verfasst am: 31. März 2010 21:12 Titel: |
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| Danke für´s drüberschauen. Mir ging´s nur um den Text.Die fehlenden Sachen werden im Schreiben natürlich ergänzt oder im CV erwähnt. Mfg Frontosa |
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| Verfasst am: 31. März 2010 18:41 Titel: Englische Bewerbung |
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| Hier mal die ganze Struktur einer richtigen Bewerbung: Cover Letter - of Application Structure: Full address with telephone number Date Re: Application for a Traineeship Salutation Short introduction or presentation (student of..... in the..... semester at the College/University.......;wish to go abroad for the next practical training semester) Short description of past employers, training, proficiency, practical studies, knowledge of the English language, special skills Reasons for spending the practical training semester abroad Wish to get a chance to work abroad, conclusion Yours sincerely Signature Enclosures Was dir fehlt sind : - Anschrift - Datum - Kenntnisse aufschreiben, wie Sprachen und Office-knowledges Der Rest ist aber OK. |
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| Verfasst am: 31. März 2010 12:37 Titel: Bitte um Bewerbung Korrektur |
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| Hallo, da ich neu im Forum bin zuerst einmal Hallo.  Ich würde eine Korrektur zu folgenden Text brauchen: Dear Mr. Miller, in response to your advertisement in the Standard, I would like to be considered for the Sales Representative position of XY Eyewear. I work as an optician department head for 10 years. My responsibilities includes the planning and execution of sales forecast, training for new staff and customer care. These skills will enable me to deal with clients’ needs effectively. Besides I am presently studying Industrial Management at the University of Applied Science in Vienna and I will have my bachelor degree in 1 month. Since my study I could strengthen my economical and industrial knowledge, so my qualifications match your requirements precisely. I would be very grateful for the opportunity to meet you and for further information, please feel free to contact me at anytime. Yours sincerely Vielen Dank für die Hilfe im Vorraus! mfg Frontosa |
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