 Verfasst am: 03. März 2005 16:58 Titel: Re: Textüberprüfung (dringend) |
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| Viele Dinge sind hier meiner Meinung nach schlecht ausgedrückt. Ich hab bloß mal deine Fehler verbessert und auch nicht die von beiden Texten. Vielleicht hat ja jemand anderer noch Zeit, Verbesserungsvorschläge bezüglich Stil und Inhalts zu geben und den Rest zu verbessern. lg kiki 1)I think the most important invention is medicinE. 2)A lot of people would DIE, IF we had NO medicine. 3)Today people think medicinE is NORMAL, but IN FORMER TIMES people USED TO DIE FROM FEVER. 4) MedicinE changed HUMAN LIVES A LOT (sehr stark) 5)MEDICINE IS GETTING BETTER ALL THE TIME. 6)Today MOST DISEASES CAN BE CURED. 7)So MANY PEOPLE WILL live longer and ONE DAY the world will be overcrowded. 8)In countries like Germany we have more than enough medicinE and some countries, like countries in Africa have no medicinE. 9) So medicinE has changed OUR LIVES A LOT, but NOT ALL LIVES. 2: 1)(Gradually)?? THERE are two difficult questions. |
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| Verfasst am: 02. März 2005 19:16 Titel: Textüberprüfung (dringend) |
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| Hallo! Ich bitte euch meine beiden Texte zu überprüfen: 1: 1)I think the most important invention is medicin. 2)A lot of people would be dead, when we had not had medicin. 3)Today the people think medicin is natural, but on one time people died, because they have fever. 4) Medicin changed the life of the humans very strong (sehr stark) 5)The medicin was better fro year to year. 6)Today you can cure the most ilnesses. 7)So all humans live longer and on one time the world will be overcrowded. 8)In countries like Germany we have more than enough medicin and some countries,like countries in africa, have no medicin. 9) So medicin has changed the life of a lot people, but not of all. 2: 1)Gradually that are two difficult questions. 2)When I have a lot of useful and funny things, like music or games, it is a good feeling. 3) I feel, that I am integrated in the modern life. 4)And you can impress other people, because not everyone has these things. 5)That makes youfeel good in some way. 6)But when you see other people, which have problems and you can help them, this is a very different way to feel good. 7)When you help them and they feel better, you feel better, too. 8)That makes you proud. 9)I like both ways to feel good. Ich bitte um Berichtigung, wenn ihr Fehler seht und um Verbesserungsvorschläge, wenn es euch nicht zu viel Arbeit ist. Danke |
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