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 Hallo! Der post kommt spät aber ich habe mich erst gestern registriert und ausserdem hilft es vielleicht auch anderen. Der text is ganz gut! ich würde kleinigkeiten ändern:
Ich würde eher schreiben "provided by a computer" weil es von einem computer zur verfügung gestellt wird.
So geschrieben sagt der satz das der freedom tower schon gebaut ist. Mein vorschlag: "the Freedom Tower is being built at Ground Zero." so zeigt es das der bau noch nicht vollended ist.
Also ich würde schreiben: "was first used by the military" Oder "At the beginning Ground Zero was a term used by the..."<-- Der gefällt mir mehr  weil er sagt das Ground Zero ein term ist.
Der satzbau is verdreht. ich würde sowas in der richtung schreiben: "but in Dublin a building which is a lot higher, is already build"
Anstatt "is shift", würde ich schreiben: "has been shift".
ich weiss nicht was du damit meinst aber wenn du sagen willst das der ort nicht mehr so attractiv ist dann würde ich schreiben: "the location of this building" Weiss nicht ob dir das noch hilft. Aber falls doch schreib ich es trotzdem hin  . Bis dann  Gruß RedDuke |
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| Verfasst am: 21. Nov 2006 22:27 Titel: Gramatik etc. in Ordnung? |
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| Hey, könntet ihr euch bitte diesen Text hier durchlesen und schauen ob er so gut geschrieben ist? Five years after the September 11th attacks, Lower Manhattan continues its revival. This building on the picture would be the new World Trade Center. Its name is Freedom Tower. The picture was provided in the computer. The building doesn’t exist yet. Since April 27th 2006 the Freedom Tower is built at Ground Zero. The word Ground Zero was first use in the military as designation of an explosion place of a bomb over the ground. Since September 11th the word means also the place of the destroyed World Trade Center in New York. The architects of the building are from Germany Daniel Libeskind and from the USA David Childs. The height of the tower will be 541 meters. Actually the tower should be the highest building on the world but in Dublin is already build a building which is lot higher. In May 2005 there were again warnings that the skyscraper isn’t secure for terror attacks. So the building is partly lower than 8 meters away from the street. Through this, the danger of car bomb attacks rises. Governor declares so after the warnings that the plans will be revised. Also the economy of the building is questioned very often. Experts mean that there are not enough companies and people which will draw into the building because of the popularity of this monument. The fear of further terror attacks seams to be very high. Further the economical center of New York is shift to other regions in Manhattan. So the location in this building isn’t so attractive like before. Probably the building will be finished at the end of 2010. Vielen Dank |
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