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[quote="me nochmal"][quote="me"][quote="Ulli"]Hier mein Korrekturvorschlag dazu, No Name :) [b] Bears[/b] [b]prefer[/b] pop-corn "At first it was terrible but in the [b]end[/b] it was funny", a woman said to a newspaper reporter. On the city celebration, which took place in Kassel, a lot of people [b]felt [/b]the same. They went there to have fun and they [b]expected[/b] a funny evening. Parents took their kids with them because of the carousels [b]and also [color=red]of [/color][/b] of the circus[color=red] too[/color]. These year it is a big sensation because the artists want to entrance with a real brown bear. Something like that [b]hasn´t [color=blue]ever[/color] [/b] been [b]happened[/b] in the past. But the [b]staff of the circus[/b] p(und jetzt brauch ich die vergangenheit von must?) [b] had to [/b]change their programm because the audience [b]didn´t [/b]want to see animals like hares ore something [b]similar[/b]. The kids often[b] asked[/b] their parents [color=red]when[/color] [color=blue]if[/color] the performance [b]would [/b]begin. While people[b] were[/b] talking with [color=red]other ones[/color] [color=blue]each[/color][color=blue] other[/color], [b]were [/b]eating and drinking, a girl [b]came and said:[/b] " I [b]have [/b]to warn you, because the brown bear [b][color=red]has[/color] disappeared!" [/b] Then the police [b]was[/b] called. A voice through the loadspeakers [b]instructed[/b], [color=red]that [/color]all people[color=blue] [color=red]to[/color] [/color][color=red]should[/color] leave the place because the police [b]had to[/b] catch the bear. But at the same moment the big animal [b]was [/b]seen. The people[b] were [/b]so shocked, that they[b] were not able [/b]do or [color=blue]to[/color] say [b]anything[/b]. Nobody [b]made[/b] a move. The animal[b] looked [/b]dangerous and hungry. "I thought he would attack a person", a man said. Some people [b]cried.[/b] The bear[b] walked[/b] through the [b]crowd [/b] but what [b]was[/b] he going to do? The police [b]arrived.[/b] They [b]wanted[/b] to stop the bear. But the bear [b]had found [/b]what he [b]had been searching [/b]for: He [b]stood[/b] in front of a cabin and [b]ate[/b] pop-corn .Of course he likes pop-corn. All the people[b] felt [/b]relieved. That city celebration will[b] be never [/b][b]forgotten[/b]! [/quote] soll ganz und gar keine kritik sein. aber ich denke ich hab noch ein paar fehlerchen gefunden, weil mir grad so langweilig war :lolhammer: liebe grüße[/quote][/quote]
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easybor
Verfasst am: 24. Nov 2005 21:13
Titel: Noch ein kleiner fehler=)
This
year it is a big sensation because the artists want to entrance with a real brown bear.
me nochmal
Verfasst am: 29. Jul 2005 10:35
Titel: Re: Korrekturvorschlag
me hat Folgendes geschrieben:
Ulli hat Folgendes geschrieben:
Hier mein Korrekturvorschlag dazu, No Name
Bears
prefer
pop-corn
"At first it was terrible but in the
end
it was funny", a woman said to a newspaper reporter.
On the city celebration, which took place in Kassel, a lot of people
felt
the same.
They went there to have fun and they
expected
a funny evening.
Parents took their kids with them because of the carousels
and also
of
of the circus
too
. These year it is a big sensation because the artists want to entrance with a real brown bear. Something like that
hasn´t
ever
been
happened
in the past. But the
staff of the circus
p(und jetzt brauch ich die vergangenheit von must?)
had to
change their programm because the audience
didn´t
want to see animals like hares ore something
similar
.
The kids often
asked
their parents
when
if
the performance
would
begin.
While people
were
talking with
other ones
each
other
,
were
eating and drinking, a girl
came and said:
" I
have
to warn you, because the brown bear
has
disappeared!"
Then the police
was
called. A voice through the loadspeakers
instructed
,
that
all people
[color=red]to
[/color]
should
leave the place because the police
had to
catch the bear. But at the same moment the big animal
was
seen. The people
were
so shocked, that they
were not able
do or
to
say
anything
. Nobody
made
a move. The animal
looked
dangerous and hungry.
"I thought he would attack a person", a man said. Some people
cried.
The bear
walked
through the
crowd
but what
was
he going to do?
The police
arrived.
They
wanted
to stop the bear. But the bear
had found
what he
had been searching
for: He
stood
in front of a cabin and
ate
pop-corn .Of course he likes pop-corn.
All the people
felt
relieved. That city celebration will
be never
forgotten
!
soll ganz und gar keine kritik sein. aber ich denke ich hab noch ein paar fehlerchen gefunden, weil mir grad so langweilig war
liebe grüße
me
Verfasst am: 29. Jul 2005 10:32
Titel: Re: Korrekturvorschlag
Ulli hat Folgendes geschrieben:
Hier mein Korrekturvorschlag dazu, No Name
Bears
prefer
pop-corn
"At first it was terrible but in the
end
it was funny", a woman said to a newspaper reporter.
On the city celebration, which took place in Kassel, a lot of people
felt
the same.
They went there to have fun and they
expected
a funny evening.
Parents took their kids with them because of the carousels
and also
of
of the circus
too
. These year it is a big sensation because the artists want to entrance with a real brown bear. Something like that
hasn´t
ever
been
happened
in the past. But the
staff of the circus
p(und jetzt brauch ich die vergangenheit von must?)
had to
change their programm because the audience
didn´t
want to see animals like hares ore something
similar
.
The kids often
asked
their parents
when
if
the performance
would
begin.
While people
were
talking with
other ones
each
other
,
were
eating and drinking, a girl
came and said:
" I
have
to warn you, because the brown bear
has
disappeared!"
Then the police
was
called. A voice through the loadspeakers
instructed
,
that
all people
to
should
leave the place because the police
had to
catch the bear. But at the same moment the big animal
was
seen. The people
were
so shocked, that they
were not able
do or
to
say
anything
. Nobody
made
a move. The animal
looked
dangerous and hungry.
"I thought he would attack a person", a man said. Some people
cried.
The bear
walked
through the
crowd
but what
was
he going to do?
The police
arrived.
They
wanted
to stop the bear. But the bear
had found
what he
had been searching
for: He
stood
in front of a cabin and
ate
pop-corn .Of course he likes pop-corn.
All the people
felt
relieved. That city celebration will
be never
forgotten
!
soll ganz und gar keine kritik sein. aber ich denke ich hab noch ein paar fehlerchen gefunden, weil mir grad so langweilig war
liebe grüße
Ulli
Verfasst am: 04. Jul 2005 20:28
Titel:
no name hat Folgendes geschrieben:
super klasse!
Vielen
, vielen, vielen Dank!
Hi no name,
vielen Dank für dein liebes Feedback. Gern geschehen
- aber ohne Gewähr
.
no name
Verfasst am: 04. Jul 2005 18:41
Titel:
super klasse!
Vielen
, vielen, vielen Dank!
Ulli
Verfasst am: 04. Jul 2005 17:39
Titel: Korrekturvorschlag
Hier mein Korrekturvorschlag dazu, No Name
Bears
prefer
pop-corn
"At first it was terrible but in the
end
it was funny", a woman said to a newspaper reporter.
On the city celebration, which took place in Kassel, a lot of people
felt
the same.
They went there to have fun and they
expected
a funny evening.
Parents took their kids with them because of the carousels
and also of
of the circus too. These year it is a big sensation because the artists want to entrance with a real brown bear. Something like that
hasn´t
been
happened
in the past. But the
staff of the circus
p(und jetzt brauch ich die vergangenheit von must?)
had to
change their programm because the audience
didn´t
want to see animals like hares ore something
similar
.
The kids often
asked
their parents when the performance
would
begin.
While people
were
talking with other ones,
were
eating and drinking, a girl
came and said:
" I
have
to warn you, because the brown bear
has disappeared!"
Then the police
was
called. A voice through the loadspeakers
instructed
, that all people should leave the place because the police
had to
catch the bear. But at the same moment the big animal
was
seen. The people
were
so shocked, that they
were not able
do or say
anything
. Nobody
made
a move. The animal
looked
dangerous and hungry.
"I thought he would attack a person", a man said. Some people
cried.
The bear
walked
through the
crowd
but what
was
he going to do?
The police
arrived.
They
wanted
to stop the bear. But the bear
had found
what he
had been searching
for: He
stood
in front of a cabin and
ate
pop-corn .Of course he likes pop-corn.
All the people
felt
relieved. That city celebration will
be never
forgotten
!
Tipp: Übe bei
www.ego4u.de
Grammatik
No name
Verfasst am: 03. Jul 2005 18:00
Titel: Bitte um Korrektur!
Hi,
kann mir bitte jemand diesen text korrigieren?! Macht nichts, wenn es nicht 100prozentig stimmt!
Bear prefers pop-corn!
"At first it was terrible but in the End it was funny", a woman said to a newspaper reporter.
On the city celebration, which took place in Kassel, a lot of people feeled the same.
They went there to have fun and they exspected a funny evening.
Parents took their kids with them because of the carousels but because of the circus, too. These year, it is a big sensation, because the artists want to entrance with a real brown bear. Something like that hadn´t been taken in the past. But the circuspeople (und jetzt brauch ich die vergangenheit von must?) change their programm because the audience don´t want to see animals like hares ore something like them.
The kids often ask their parents when the performance is going to begin.
While people are talking with other ones, are eating and drinking, a girl come and say: " I had to warn you, because the brown bear is lost!"
Then the police is called. A voice through the loadspeakers orders, that all people should leave the place because the police must catch the bear. But at the same moment the big animal is seen. The people are so shocked, that they can´t do or say enything. Nobody make a move. The animal looks dangerous and hungry.
"I thought he would attack a person", a man said. Some people cry. The bear walks through the people but what are he going to do?
The police arrive. They want to stop the bear. But the bear has finding what he was saerching for: He stands in front of a cabin and eats pop-corn!Of course, he likes pop-corn!
All the people are relieved. That city celebration will they nerver forget!
Bitte verbessert mir die fehler, die ihr seht! LG